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Lead Me Back To You


I am a flowing wave in the river of life
the currents pull at me moving me along
I see you standing in the distance
but the water's wish is my command.

I roll along the waters surface
looking for a place to call home
I cannot for there is not a single
piece of land for me to wash upon.

I've flowed so far with this river
that I can no longer see you, love
I pray that somehow, some way
The river's current will lead me back someday.

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to my husband who is leaving for boot camp tomorrow...I'll miss you, love.

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    September 28, 2008

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    Humm..indeed a thoughtdful poetry you brought here especially the last line is very thought provoking..the immages are very strong..well done...


  • Paloszoo gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    I love your take on this prompt. It was very creative and imaginative.

    I roll along the waters surface
    looking for a place to call home
    I cannot for there is not a single
    piece of land for me to wash upon.


    I love that stanza. Excellent! Good luck in the contest!


  • afroqban
    September 23, 2008

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    I have felt like this before. Good take on the quote, and a beautiful tribute to your husband. well done