She rises from the grave by night,
Her rage and hate unfed.
Unfairly killed upon that day,
When vows and thoughts were read.
To him she gave her heart and soul,
And he returned in kind,
A brutal deed so cold of will.
How could she be so blind?
So now a year has passed since then,
A year unto the day.
And so she seeks him out once more,
For vengeance come what may.
Woman scorned, hear her roar,
Make the night her own.
For when she finds her killer groom,
Bestow the rage she’s grown.
Senses tingle, eyes of black,
And so she feels him near.
He’ll rue the day he took her life,
Her thoughts and will are clear.
She finds him sleeping out the night,
In lavish room throughout.
Bought with silver left by her,
So now there is no doubt.
She drags him screaming from his bed,
‘Behold your corpse like bride.
Did you think I’d leave you be?
A year since whence I died’
He humbled in her haunting glare,
His eyes red rimmed with tears.
Confused she sees that love is there,
Consuming all his fears.
‘Take my life, my corpse like bride,
Your death was not my will,
Without you here, I cannot live,
Of grief, I’ve had my fill…
You tripped and fell and banged your head,
And so your death ensued.
Take me with you, please my love,
To live in death renewed.’
Her eyes are full of tears now,
As hate and rage subside.
Could she really be so wrong,
About the night she died?
She takes his hand and leads him free,
His body dead and still.
And so they walk in blissful death,
The bride and groom fulfilled…
Author notes
DARK...
Pic 2
Credit: Give_me_one_kiss_by_SatanicChild
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1000 points, ended October 3, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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This was well done!
The picture went well with the poem I believe. I loved this! You had amazing imagery and fantastic emotions. I loved the ending as well! So dark, twisted, and creepy all at the same time! BRAVO! WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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OMG, I really like this! This is an amazing story. I love how the end was completely not what the reader is expecting. I like your language choice as well as the flow and rhyme.
OMG, I want to know if she was really that wrong about the night she died!
This is brilliant, thank you for entering my contest
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i really like this. it's awesome. -
This was a wonderfully written poem...It reminds me of something I would love to write...the twist wasn't that shocking but it still was a twist..thank you for your well-written entry
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you definitely have a good skill, i enjoyed all three of these poems you entered into my contest. thank you and good luck
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ooooh, how creepy and romantic! Makes me shiver. . .Like everyone says, excellent twist on the end. They're together now, at least. . . good work, sir.
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awwwww now thats so romanic , keep this cus il be doing a fansay love contest , but i like it nice and dark - hugs - i loved it
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Good one Fritz and what a brilliant twist to the end. You are expecting the blood and gore ending and it is quite different. The old Hammer Horror movies could of had a really good story line here. You could do the music score too. Well done. Sheila
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I love a twist in the tale, and this surely gave one! At first I was thinking the old adage "hell hath no fury like...." and then WOW that ending came from nowhere! It turned from a creepy and atmospheric chiller into a sweet and touching love story in one verse!
A pat on the back and some clappy things for you, sir!
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What a great story
I especially loved the
surprise ending!
You Gave me goosebumps!
I love it!
P.S the pic is awesome.
Congrats on the HM's
~Pastel
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A good story with a surprise ending. Your rhyme scheme is excellent. Thanks for entering.
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Very interesting a good twist on the end. Wonderfully writen. Thank you for entering.
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An excellent read. I loved the twist and the easy rhyme and flow. Good luck in the contest
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Wow, you have outdone yourself here! Really didn't think that was possible! I love the twist this tale holds, so refreshing to read. The ending is unique and a happy one
Love the word play and the imagery. Rhyme and flow are spot on as ever. Outstanding piece! Thanks for entering and good luck
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Darkly deliscious!!! I really enjoyed this write. Love the way you made the corpse bride LIVE...long enough to take her groom to his rightful place!!! Wonderful my friend!!!
Az
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Very dark great job.
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Excellent!
Great wording, images and emotion. Love the story! Reads nicely. Excellent!
best wishes in the contest
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A wonderful dark tale you've told here!! Love the ending especially!! Wicked
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LOVE THIS!!! wow, such absolutely amazing imagery...I love where you took the picture. As always, the tale you weave with your words is heart felt and full of the most wonderful emotion. Thank you for sharing this, and all the best in the contest,
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This Is Dark
I love this it is realy dark, When I read this I get the picture of a mad woman and a her dark emotions that lay hiden but come to the surface after she gets married and the groom kills her then after she is dead she comes back in a year and makes him pay for the dark feeling she always had inside her, This is a great write love it.
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Great job, this was quite the story you conjured up, and I enjoyed every word of it. Keep up the good work.
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Awesome hauntingly harrowing !
Such remorse and revenge etched brilliantly hun
Love the last stanza and that final line!
Best wishes in Pinks contest
Julie
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wow this is powerful!!! You did an excellent job writing!!! I love the detail you put in this to describe the corpse like bride!!!! This is perfect!!! It is absolutely amazing and fantastic!!! All of your lines and stanzas are perfect!!! I love it!!! Much love Jewel
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