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infected

it silently breeds in the ambit of night,
‘neath the sanctum sanctorum deep in my soul,
with your lies breeding hate like a parasite;
consuming me whole.

transient veils of darkness gracing night skies,
watching black hands that wipe hours from the clock
bleeding hearts from wooden stakes driven by lies,
tick, tick, tock; tick, tock.

alone in the sea of selfish psychosis,
I recant infections of a hostile word.
festering nemesis feeds my neurosis,
it’s all so absurd.

so at one in the morning as I sit all alone
and remember the girl that once was so pure,
I shall lick the wounds that my heart has outgrown
and feel insecure.

 

 

 

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Amera - Amaranthine Lover

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  • Age of Rain
    September 25, 2008

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    could your starting line be any better? I think not. *grins*

    'sanctum sanctorum' Gorgeous alliteration. And I mean GORGEOUS.

    'sea of selfish psychosis,'
    the sounds and the flow of this is really good. it sort of sings.

    'I shall lick the wounds that my heart has outgrown'
    my favorite line.


    I love this. Then, I love all your work.


  • myrataal silver member
    September 24, 2008

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    Oh ...

    so sad so sad said the clock tick tock



    But: so good so good swooned the clock tick tock



    Well done Precious.

    Love
    Myra


  • plainoljoe
    September 24, 2008

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    Such an excellent style master you are. With verse like this, you have no reason to feel insecure

    joe


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 24, 2008

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    Sad, deep, haunting, beautiful.. and I can read myself in the lines!

    Stunning write hun!


  • paulcreates silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    I'm continually amazed at your work Amera. Just wait till you're my age, you will have been a poet laureate for a while I'm sure of it. I wish I had started earlier myself.

    Paul


  • HaleyMary
    September 23, 2008
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    Powerful write, Amera. I liked the last two stanzas the best. It seemed very dark and it made me think of how even in the darkest of minds, there may still exist a feeling of loneliness. Wonderful poetic form, as always.

    Thanks for sharing your talent and best of luck in the contest.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Been annoying the hell out of me reading a poem hours before getting to comment
    This is in a terrific meter beautifully rhymed. Introspective and deep with it.


    Great stuff

    NB.NHB.NHBAA


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    My word, Sis, you are mining a pretty deep vein these days. Bunnies for sure!


  • Melodies
    September 23, 2008

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    Well said with thoughts we appreciate. Life pivots on the smallest acts and that change sends us into introspection. Your lovely writing captures my admiration.

  • montez gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    Excellent

    Lovely flow and rhythm, but, just to be pedantic, I'm sure it's "tick" tock.
    Regards,
    Robin.


    • Amera gold member
      September 23, 2008
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      humm... Thanks, I think you're right!


  • malmadre gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    I think that the night brings out these things in us, a little bit of darkness that surprises, we see ourselves in the lack of light in so many different ways, before the day makes us get up and put on a smile, we all can relate to the last line
    Beautiful form and rhyme, excellent for the prompt.


  • Faeryn
    September 23, 2008

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    oh wow! Very hard form but what an amazing poem!! Very dark; love the emotion in it.
    love,
    Tay

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