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Friction

Breeze kissing cold
surround frozen
heart shrank
moments slowed
her warm  massage
drove vital organs

Author notes

Her hands are still warm


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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    September 24, 2008
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    So very well expressed... x


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Remarkable what the right touch can do.

    So very well expressed, here.


  • poppa
    September 23, 2008

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    wonderful write and love your take on the prompt... think you have one too many "r"s in the word surround...

    good luck in the contest
    poppa.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    I like this interpretation of the prompt, it had me thinking a little about how you got there and I like it. Best to you in the contest