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May Freedom's Candles Shine On Her Face

Her small frame in white housecoat

freshly showered, sixteen candles.

A knock upon steel door,

worried look cautioned her clean face.


Her mouth formed two words

"Not now"

The wolf pounced,

snarling obscenities across the house.

Close behind, my eyes shot lightning.


Cowering under his large shadow

blond hair falling across her face.

heaving tears fell, upon tiny shaking hands

darkness snuffed out lighted birthday cake.


Terrorising wolf raised a fist

phone in my hand, imaginary scream

"maybe me, but never her!"

One final push, our lives changed.


Seventeen candles, freedom's smile

will light our dwelling soon.

Make-up and friends love will mend

laughter and song around us,

my baby girl once again.

Author notes

mom will love you and keep you safe always. We are free looked down upon from people who never knew my 20 years of hell and my children having to endure but i finally freed myself and them.
Yes it's scary and i was alone, hardship came but with kindness of others i made it. We are Survivers!!!!!!!!

Please spread your story to everyone who will listen, post it on bulletin boards in grocery stores, churches, colleges, on telephone poles, in bus & train stations, anywhere there is a lot of traffic.


3. Freedom -- Leaving your abuser is the hardest thing you ever have to do, once you are in a relationship that beats you down to nothing. You have no self-esteem or confidence in yourself, you feel depressed, worthless, defeated and dirty. You are embarrassed about your bruises and the bad treatment of you verbally in front of others. How do we help these women have faith in themselves again? How do we give them courage to leave, to file a report of complaint with the police and authorities? (Not that a lot of state's police force will do anything anyway, but at least a person of an institution is notified.) How do we help them and their children start a new life, by teaching them to fish, not just giving them a fish?

Take my small story and run...don'y worry there is a way out.
You have a choise believe me for years i didn't know.

Ps.
To a special friend who feed my kids pizza when he knew i had nothing from far away... i will never forget your kindness.

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  • wvtwinklestar gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Victory

    A tear,knowing your brave struggle as a mother for her children and yourself.I like how you remain positive and know seventeen candles will be
    full of laughter and joy..but still take time and lend
    a hand.May the Lord richly bless you!
    hugs
    Conni~


  • DragonBlue gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Excellent commentary

    in your author's notes. Please spread your story to everyone who will listen, post it on bulletin boards in grocery stores, churches, colleges, on telephone poles, in bus & train stations, anywhere there is a lot of traffic. Please run your poem through a spell/grammar check as there were a few errors. When you are done with the edit, let me know and I will come back to score it. Thank you for entering my contest.

    Blessed Be~
    )O(
    DragonBlue

  • piccola silver member
    October 8, 2008

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    this really got rave reviews didn't it? I enjoyed it too. There is something I noticed that you might want to correct though; "One final push "


  • Xianaria gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    This is Gold to me...A mother's love & protection is more important than shinies. Your reward awaits you when she comes to realize just how much you do love & care for her.

    I love you~
    Tim


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    This si a vey heartfelt piece of writing, tat quite literaly stopped me dead in my tracks, very powerful imagry well written and good luck in the contest littlefishesone


  • snowbird600
    September 29, 2008

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    Wow! I don't knwo what to say. Cold and yet, and ending to change the whole out look.
    Good writing!
    Stef-


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 27, 2008

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    i was literally gripped while reading this.
    your a/n gave me a lump in my throat, Lisa...
    i am so happy the sun is shining down on her
    now...Love, Lane


  • tomisb
    September 26, 2008

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    This feels and looks like a scene torn from a morality play of abuse and the rewards of standing up to an abuser. Very powerful, well done.
    Peace & Light,
    Tom B.


  • Kappa Pyua
    September 26, 2008

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    This is a problem that face many households. I'm glad this had a happy ending. Abuse is way to common these days for my taste. Almost like everyone believes in that old philosipher, I think but I'll check later, is John locke and the natural man. It's wrong. There is good in everyone if only they choose to be so. Thx for sharing. UNT


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 24, 2008

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    Well done. This is a very sad poem, until the last verse. The seventeenth birthday sounds positive.

    Great job.

    Mike


  • kao3
    September 24, 2008

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    Fantastic

    No shit, you had me seeing red the entire time. Draws attention in and forces it to conclusion. Amazing piece, You will do well in the contest.

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