blood shot
at the speed of light
bullets seethe
over boiled rivers
that froth like
i pissed in your mouth
vile wretch.
betray. succumb.
decay.
fester
in my acid.
as you exhale
carbon.
A contest entry
- Hatred at it's best. by Rejected Easter Egg.
1080 points, ended October 25, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FIst fight by hyper thing.
400 points, ended February 4, 8 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nicely written...though some of the imagery you used is too dark for me...but hey..that's just my personal opinion. Good luck with the contest.
Mariana
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Wow, I like how the style you wrote went with stanza's. Also anger seeks through each word. This is just really amazing.
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remind me to stick on yer good side. vivid write.
ing alone,
Mylee
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