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what two years can do

I can remember the visceral longing for

the Russell and Bromley Diabla shoes

burned red and stackheeled that made

you put one foot before the other and

stalk the scene like a slap on the head

and a skirt that hung flat from hip bone

to hip bone black-on-white countered

dogtooth and chalkstriped in red ochre

that said sex and queened your paces

 

two years on and the scene had gone

as had the fuck-may-care desire to slap

they had shifted all my shit from a-to-b

there were so many things I still wanted

to be but poet was not amongst them

(so enough said

 

 

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  • Cinnarry gold member
    October 10, 2008
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    bookmarked


  • Amera gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    The imagery in this is is wonderful. "sex and queened your paces" huh? Not bad, not bad at all. You are a potty mouth though.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    forget all that...slip
    on a pair of rubber flip-flops
    now that you know you are a poet,
    and kick back a nice shot of rum.

    with me

    Love, Lane


  • Balldinger silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    brain matter...

    like a gag-reflexive yank on sack-goggled tongue, this reflective diddy noodles in between so many nooks and crannies that it illuminates itself often on its own slippery turns through congenital hallways leading straight for the vomitorium. love the tap dance that leads the way through this lovely little piece of chirpy storage and Flemmish expulsion. ~ EZB


  • malmadre gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    A confident woman strides across these pages in whatever is the chosen shoe of the day. I find that I run about ten years behind on whatever the style may be, especially haircuts, I am currently running about a few thousand years behind the poetry thing.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Filled with great imagery as usual. It is a wise woman who ever knows what she wants to be

    Great stuff all round.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 23, 2008
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      I must be totally stupid, because I was forty-something before I realised I wanted to write!


      • Pure Thought silver member
        September 25, 2008

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        Well, I never wanted to write it's just something I have always done. So, stashed in cardboard corners and tucked in uncountable notebooks, lie a plethora of forgotten words.
        It's just something I do, like breathe, sometimes deeply and at others raggedly gasping for health.

        Sorry I ramble.


      • cricketjeff gold member
        September 23, 2008
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        I was 49


  • Cannonsfire
    September 23, 2008

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    LOL Ah Mairi you have the gift to delve inside this woman beyond her cognac and see the syrupy bits as well C


  • Peteskid gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    so many dreams and wishes and expressive writing was not a blip; so much the better that it finds us rather than the other way...excellent...PK

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