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changing bedrooms
only became Daddy's gift
when birds chirp through blinds,
for a nature girl -

I open the south window,
as sunlight
airing my comfort




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line six tells the option number - sunshine!

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    I like this one for I am a nature person myself .

    Ah to step outside at sunrise and hear the world breath and the animals awake is a true gift and everyday see the new water colors painted upon the skies for my eyes only .Good work here .I have teen friendly work on this sight you may enjoy I would love to know what you think f my work as well