Thunder so loud but then again so refreshing to hear.
Lightning so fierce but then again so exciting to watch.
Blood flowing so fast but then again such an adrenaline rush you love.
Sweat dripping down your face from the heat in the air but then again the best workout you've had all day.
Heart beating as fast as the rain seems to fall but then again your heart beats faster.
Chaos seems to take over the day but then again love seizes the moment.
Love for another person seems to be stronger than any fear in the world but then again is it really?
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For me, it's too much of the "but then again". I get the concept, I just feel it's overdone and detracts from the poem. Also, I don't think center aligning for this works. I would left align and use line breaks for some of the "but then again"s or not use it as anything but the title...
Thunder so loud
but then again so refreshing to hear
Lightning so fierce
so exciting to watch
Keep in mind this is only my opinion and you should not alter anything you do not agree with it as it is your creation
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Very nicee. =]
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Nice work.It makes you think.
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my favorite line was "Heart beating as fast as the rain seems to fall but then again your heart beats faster."
this has to be one of my favorite poems so fare ....
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