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Saturnight

staggering blindly
feelin' sublimely
how'd i get in this place
people dancing
i'm in a trance and
i can't feel my face
my friends draw near
they spill their beers
we all mourn the waste
the hours pass
the night went fast
inside this happy space
i drank too much
start to vomit and such
i cant stand the taste

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