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Stop.

This charade is too much.
This mask is too heavy.



And you're a waste of my time.

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  • SignifyingNothing
    October 18, 2008
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    This actually reminds me of one of my poems called "Mirror Mask" which pretty much has the same theme.

    I like this though. It's short and to the point, but also manages to use poetic language and some good metaphors.

    The last line is a little bit too blunt, I think, for the poetic language of the first two. But that's just a nitpick. It really is ok as it is.

    Thanks for entering.

  • blind ecye dog
    October 10, 2008

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    I'm a little disappointed by the title but do like the content.
    The last line has to many words. I think you can do better. RED