Catch me for once
sing me to sleep
in misery?
Fall to desire
as I walk upon your grave.
How hostile, how morbid.
Can't you see my insanity?
Slice away the images,
of one, of two, three.
What is there?
Only a pile of rags
burnt to the ground.
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I re-read it and now I like it..thought it was horrible the first time. Haha.
Do read...Tell me whatcha think.
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I like it but...I don't know why, this one may have to settle with me for awhile. I'll re-read it later.
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Ok I re-read it and its taken on a different light to me. A lil depressing and morbid. Still good stuff though.
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I am a bit depressing and morbid..you know this. Thanks for re-reading it and understanding it more!! And liking it as well. That's always good :-D.
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I really lie this, Kase. Actually I really do. I'll comment again later. But I wanted to tell you now I liked it. Feel free to remind me to recomment...I'm on vaca I'm not supposed to be using the net
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Let's see.
I do not know what your inspiration for this piece was...however it hits me on a personal level, if you can understand that. Every line in this speaks to me as if I am you...you are me. Something like a nightmare I haven't yet found my way out of. I feel like I am being vague...I know I am.
The situation is desperate, it's hostile, confused, miserable. It's an addiction. I'm tired of people talking about holding up the world when really it's my arms that are tired.
"Catch me for once
sing me to sleep
in misery?"
Everything was a fight. A fight for love...when I was so willing to give. Giving over and over and what did I receive when I asked for simple things like someone to catch me when I feel? Misery.
I feel our experience is much the same...but this brings me back to not know what your inspiration for this piece was.
I like this piece every much because it grabs my emotions. I can relate to it, though it's painful. It's short but it says so much. I feel like screaming and crying and so much more...I can't explain.
It's safe to say I love this...because I know I'm not alone. I know someone understands. And I know I can walk away from the 'pile of rags' with my head held high.
so many reasons why this is brilliant. I only could express a few.
<3Emily
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Awww thank you so much!!! I think my inspiration of this poem was reading yours..and then deciding I wanted to write my own because I haven't in a while. Honestly. At first I was like...gah not another one of those kind of poems..and then it became so different, weird and I don't know..it was just...it just came to me. That's usually where my poetry comes from anyway.
I am very glad you like this..if you want to print it out to post on your wall, fine by me (just give me credit) if you wanna put it on your page...same thing. If you want to do something with it...as long as I gets the credit for it, go for it. I am so glad you love it...it means a lot to me. *hugs*
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Aaah ok. I'll remind you!! Don't you worry about that Ms. Emily. Thanks for liking it. That's really all you said about it right now isn't it?? Tootles!!!
OMG..I re-read it and I actually really like it now. Crazy how things like that happen.
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