((Okay this is about my friend and her ex))
Long before the daylight dawn
And Eos sings her gentle song
They lay awake
Far away
Wishing for each-other
As Mid-night slowly changes into day
They just let life slip away
They go about they're awful day
passing away the chance to say
Please come back i want you to stay
But all we know is it can't be
Because this is not a story book
And life rarely has
A happy ending
Author notes
i know it's sad but it's a true story err poem.
In a list
A contest entry
- Write it to make me cry... by Blind Sight.
500 points, ended February 14, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
is it sad but at the same time good?
Comments
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Aw, how sad, but very true. The rhyming was odd, but nice. Didn't seemed pressured. Lovely.
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It's beautiful... A sad sentiment beautifully expressed. Thanks for entering.
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This is a well penned peace with a lot of emotion in it i really felt what the poem was saying i like the last stanza, because I truly believe life rarely had happy endings
~Good Luck~
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nice job.
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I loved it!
Yes i agree, a happy ending.
It's a sad and good poem, a winner for sure!
I'm just glad that littlefish recommended you to me!
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I love this, I don't know what, but there is something about this poem that makes me feel like I know your friend or something, I don't know, it just does.
It has a few typos, but I didn't mind much (surprisingly), unless of course, you meant them.
But very beautiful. And I absolutely LOVE the background.
Naoto
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thankies!
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AWWW, this poem has such raw emotion it is absolutly beautiful! and I love the mention of greek mythology...heehee
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thanks!
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Loved how simple your poem is.
Its shows wisdom and clearly states an unfortunate fact that -as you mention- life rarely has any happy endings!
Great flow and loved the twist you created, I opened your poem to read a “happy ending” to find that you meant totally something different- very creative!
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thankies
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thats great! but sad...and true
well structured and flows well. good write
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thankies! it was fun to write and Eos is the greek goddess of the dawn
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It is really good!
I love the poem! It is sad but at the same time it almost have a connection with my life. -
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why thank you
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I already commented on this, but i was happy you put it on our group. ^-^
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did you create this graphic too...lovely artistic
ability!
your poem speaks of love and friendship and how bold
the lessons teach!
may you always be friend to both...it seems they will
have great need of your compassion and understanding.
flamesdragoness
well done!
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Aw. Thats cute,and sad. Nice. I like the last stanza best. Heh.
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This is excellent. So beautiful yet so sad. Great write
~lae
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This is great. I like the way you titled it and then made it the last line also. Its full of sadness and yet not. I understand how this feels, your friend should be gladshe has such a good friend to write you this.
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i'll call her right now and thank you!
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Hi I think this is a beautiful poem sadness mixed with happiness, like when you mix up all your ice cream flavours, and can't tell which is which. Your right about it seeming as if ther aern't many happy endings, I think you just have to look for them ,but something tells me that your creative mind will help you along the way. Seriously good write, have a good day or night or whatever, littlefishone
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thanks her boyfriend moved to iceland and can't see her any more so i wrote her a poem/.
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