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Be My Guest ( Silver )

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Neon city lights,

dance  kaleidoscope of colours,

illuminating London's sky line,

on this chilly September night.

 

Pavements walked

dwellers pushing their way through the crowds,

eager their anticipation,

tickets held to hand.

 

King of Queen,

Seventies music rocked,

turntable, records played,

vinyl red... do you remember ?

 

Theatre town,

alive as the microphone turns up the volume

welcoming its stage show guests

ready for the invitation.

 

Curtain rises,

 

Atmosphere electric

orchestra in basement strikes the power of note,

to the familiar sounds of words

ringing out...

 

We danced in the aisles

sung out our hearts

rhythm to the swing

beats from within.

 

Taking a bow,

encore .. screams from the stands!

as they sing their final song..

 

So will you be my guest ?,

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  • Topaze gold member
    September 26, 2008
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    A lovely write, full of description and life. Thank you for this fine entry in this contest.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 24, 2008

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    This is so lovely!! What a sweet write!! I can feel the thrill in this write and the excitement!! I have a clear picture in my head!!! You did a beautiful job with this!!! I LOVE IT!!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    You have taken me there...it is alive and breathes with your imagery! This is my first read of your write, and I am most impressed!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    oops i forgot

    clappy thingys lol

  • perfectsunset gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Ah, this was amazing, as always.
    You sure know your country and
    you describe it well.
    Brilliantly penned with
    gorgeous imagery & thoughts.

    Loved this piece!!

    ..oh I noticed one small typo in the
    last stanza

    "as the sing their final song.."

    as "they" sing ...

    best of luck, wouldn't be
    surprised if this one gold for sure!!

    <3megz


  • Age of Rain
    September 23, 2008

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    I love the starting stanza and have just one small suggestion. 'dance kaleidoscopes of colours.' This may or may not work better. I just thought that without the 'in' they dancing comes across more freely.

    'Pavements walked' WAY cool.

    I love the direction and flow of this piece. Original imagery and phrasing accompanies an excellent piece. Well done!


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    So Cool!!!

    Outstanding!!!
    Your words bring the scene to life...
    The hustle & bustle of city life, the sights, the sounds & the atmos of ever busy London...
    Yet another enthralling & fantastic write...
    Well done!!!


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    Excellent imagery within this composition and your words breathe life into the picture.
    Well Done and Best of Luck in the contest!


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    great take on the prompt hun, such vivid imagery, i'll be your guest, anytimes :-P great write, good luck in tnhe contest


  • aboomer silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    never been to London - wasn't there a song out 'last trip (plane?) to London, leaving on runway...?" something like that? I could be wrong...lol....so many songs, so many memories...
    great job on this - wonderful images!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • maralisa silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    I loved your take on the promt your imagery is wonderful and yes I will be your guest anytime at this great show good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Wow, what a ride, fantastic air to this hunni. Sounds like the perfect night out Beautifully penned, good luck

  • Bob Fox
    September 23, 2008

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    Nice

    though I never have been to London it is a dream of mine. And the trip back in time. Well oh so nice. I do need another adventure I think. And Julie I did love that picture.

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