a musical note wrapped around a question mark
skewered by Poseidon’s trident
and hidden in Pandora’s box
perpetuating preposterous potential
A contest entry
- Set phrasers to STUN (This is a Contest.) by blind ecye dog.
850 points, ended October 17, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Did it make ya think and/or feel?
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you like the alliteration, dont you
a musical note wrapped around a question mark
skewered by Poseidon’s trident
and hidden in Pandora’s box
really liked that
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yeah, kinda partial to it, consanance too.
tongue in cheek
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I do like the wording in this. However, it seems to come to no point. An interlude with no musical presentation.
I feel like this is a part of a bigger, fuller body that could be very good. The word 'perpetuating' does seem, somehow, out of place to me.
Without your title it makes little sense and with your title it makes more than twenty words.
Pandora's box is over-rated, only Hope was not let out.
I do like the way you connected all the words, like a symphony. RED
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i love the alleration at the end, i read it over like 9 times... and its also like... the perfect line perpetuating preposterous potential perptuating preposterous potential... awesomeness
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thanx. i had to abbreviate it from what initially spewed forth due to "rules"
it orig. ended with "perpetuating the preposterous potential
of prolonged sensual sensory enhightenment"
glad ya enjoyed and appreciate all of your comments.
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