I was looking for inspiration
a day or two ago.
I found instead a reason
not
to write
It was a paperback novel
with a Crucifix
placed like a bookmark
in the center
I slipped the silver symbol
over my head
and it slid down to hang,
cool and heavy,
between my breasts
just as it did that summer
It was hot then,
all those years ago
so hot that to dress
was suffocating torture
and movement
was just
too much to ask
I'd complain that it was too damn hot
as my finger stuck to the pages
of the paperback novel
that I had decided to conquer
during the slow days
You'd correct me,
saying it wasnt the heat,
but the humidity,
and smile as you plucked the novel
from my hands
and
make me forget that I'd ever
been doing anything
but be overwhealmed
by the pleasure brought on by
the things you'd do
with lips and tounge,
teeth and fingertips.
When you were done,
lying next to me
as I lay twitching
but immobile
in the afterglow,
you'd play with
the only thing I wore
my grandmother's Crucifix
I was looking for inspiration,
but instead I found
your memory
and a reason not to write
Author notes
#'s 13 and 14: paperback novel and Crucifix
I know its a little long..
In a list
A contest entry
- Your Challenge Is To... by Dalaney.
900 points, ended October 2, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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nice, nice poem.... loved the twists and tangents, the heat and the emotion... inspiration, perspiration... it's all titillation and sometimes in the spill of all things natural we forget what it was that we were trying not to do in the first place... priceless... yea, you could hone it to perfection by whittling it down a bit, but, you could never take away the passion (just don't let him stymie your pen... you're too damn good to fall silent. ~SoAp
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Wow!
Clean, clear, tender words and sweet emotion. Reminded me of Robert Lowell's
"O, to break loose. All life's grandeur
is something with a girl in summer..."
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WOW!!!!
Such emotion!! I have things happen to remind me of someone I care about and then I just can't go on right then.
Way to many memories! 
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BAbe this is Awesome,,,,,
I really like this piece, sounds like you worked hard on it...
This is such a beautiful expression of How I wish things would be sometimes.I am truly in love with the first and second standzas....
I can't pick out a favorite part, it's all amazing!
Great write
and thanks so much for sharing this poem.
Glenn
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You've offered very effective story telling with this piece. The length of the poem can be downsized with just a little effort, if that is what you wish, I however like the languid pace to this. Nicely written. Geo
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wow. this is stunning! i love the first stanza...truly, you have entered an excellent poem, and i thank you. love, lane
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Most excellent
This should win something.
It's very good.
Joe
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Hi Caitlin
Well written memories of a hot afternoon. Maybe you didn't write then but you sure did now.
Thanks for sharing.
Buddy
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