It has been a while since I last tasted
you on a saltine cracker, I must admit.
Dreading the thought of you being wasted
Forced me to stash you in my catcher's mitt.
An obese veteran knows how to keep
their favorite snacks away from jealous peers.
But I should've known your odor would seep
under my door, to validate their fears.
I should have ate you right then, and enjoyed
your pink gelatinous slide down my throat.
But I was greedy, and instead I toyed
around with you smeared on Sunday's best coat.
There's many ways to love you, meat jelly.
Inside my foul mind, teasing my belly.
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Written January 22nd, 2004
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Lol, thanks, ah...
An American sonnet
Is a bit lazier mostly
In either content or
Pentameter Often
Jumping to an ll or a 9
syllabol line back to the ten.
Sometimes, but mostly it's my
way of dumbing down sonnet content. -
It takes talent to write sonnets as I'm sure you no doubt know.. sometimes being a somgwriter makes it easier, but maybe that's just what my friends think of me. And what is the difference between an American sonnet and a traditional one?
Poem made me smile, good job there. -
lol...nice...meat jelly?...sry...but nasty...lol good job tho..u made me laugh...good job..lol..well thanx for enterin and good luck....keep on writin cuz u have the talent...except..go easy on the meat jelly...lol jk..take care
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yeah, i imagined you as fat as well. it really is the word belly - its a santa word.
but this was disgustingly good (meat jelly??? wrong. very wrong) -
you and your mind comedy, at least you aren't waisting your it, boy u crack me, your sick
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I'm back because I am so disgusted at the idea of aspic. That stuff is grotesque and 'orrible and I cannot, for the mother living life of me, see how anyone could put it on crackers and then blithely eat it. This poetic construction frightens me more than any of your other work and I am shaken to my core. Who in the hell decided that canned meat needed some kind of jelly? What? They find this stuff in the discarded craniums and say, "Hey, we could make money selling this!" and people like you perpetuate the fraud and horror.
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Ha Ha hahahahah
It sure as hell ain't Shakespeare - he didn't go 'round writing 'bout meat jelly. Meat jelly my sweet Jesus. You're gonna go blind. You'll get hair on your hands.
Good lord.
But yah, okay, its funny. -
it ain't shakespeare but it ain't half bad is it? I liked that and on second reading enjoyed it more.
David -
you do sonnets as well.... good god is there no end to your talents. read real nice and smooth you can really get into these characterisations...i sort of imagined you really fat in this one for some reason..think its the word belly its always big.....
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