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私を除けば [save me]

What happens when i get too tired
to        go        on          ?

What happens when i get weak
                [we cant always be strong]

Paper dolls are fragile things
I      know        so        well

Can you save this fallen soul
                [only time will tell]

I think im going to end this now that
I      still      can     

If i happen to stumble- fall-
                [will you help me stand?]

Saying goodbye is so much harder than
I        ever        thought


Bury me beneath the Willow
                [and remember how hard I fought]

Author notes

another poem
that is kinda weird
and maybe just
a little lame

Please tell me what you think

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Comments

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  • GodsRebelChild
    May 8
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    this was

    very deep and emotional....great write...beautiful is a perfect term for this write....great


  • new born
    February 1
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    This is beautiful. I love the emotion, it's so strong. Beautiful poem.


  • XXheartbroken3XX
    January 10

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    wow... not lame at all! i love your poems.... they are all filled with emotion.
    EXCELLENT.
    KEEP WRITING!!
    XOXO


  • Rhythm Child
    November 17, 2008

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    your poems are so original and the format is brilliant
    its refreshing to see something so new
    a great write


  • Jaffa-
    October 20, 2008
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    ohmygosh
    I thought this was absolutly a-m-a-z-i-n-g!!!!!!!!!

  • Was
    October 11, 2008
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    awesomely not lame

    No it's not weird or lame
    I ADORE IT!!!

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