Oh, we use to have it all
Promised to love you till the end of time
Now I'm standing here alone
Wasn't able to keep you mine
Some things Ill never be able to explain
But I'll always remember your name
Just like I'll never forget that smile
But the days stack and its been awhile
Since Ive heard a voice so true
And I cant help remember a love I knew
Ohh how simple things were
There will never be anyone to compare to her,
I was so sure things would be the same
Looking back, it was just me to blame,
I took for granted everything I had,
I took all the good and made it bad,
And as I went to turn my back on it all,
You were there to break my fall,
Looking into my eyes,
I felt you read my heart
And as I looked back into yours,
You knew I'd fell apart,
And your smile brought me to tears,
The hope that neared,
And when your lips touched mine,
I knew it was till the end of time.
Author notes
So yeah, just saying, you should probably read this one. Mwhahaha, well if u want, but its my personal favorite.
A contest entry
- Live, Laugh, Love by aligurl.
425 points, ended October 11, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
I really liked this. The love and emotion just leaps from the page. Well done, and a great write. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
-
aawesome
well done
-
I could feel the emotion in every line of this but the last 8 lines really grabbed me by the heartstrings. A really beautiful read.
Best of luck in the contest!
Annie
-
While there were many very good lines in this poem, these lines really stuck out to me and I just love the way they sound in my mind when I read them...
"Wasn't able to keep you mine"
and
"But the days stack and its been awhile"
This was a very refreshing read today and I'm glad I got the chance to read it. I hope I get to read more of your work later on
Great work - keep it up! Hope you get tons of reads!!!!! 
-
Deep
That write is very deep. The word choice is simple yet effective, very nice flow =]
-
woah.
i signed on to see what's new with this place and this poem caught my attention.
as i was reading, my jaw dropped. i know i said that last one was good, but you've definitely outdone yourself this time.
absolutely fantastic. -
Looking into my eyes,
I felt you read my heart
And as I looked back into yours,
You knew I'd fell apart,
And your smile brought me to tears,
The hope that neared,
And when your lips touched mine,
I knew it was till the end of time.
Anyone who is lucky enough to have something like this, is very lucky. Hope it is true for you. Great write!
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
