In a world struck in silence
suns deceit bathes blue sky
radioactive fallout’s offence
the children are first to die.
No squeak from the swings
no birds sing their song
silent are the simple things
in a world all gone wrong.
This still life image taken
reflects a still life world
one that God has forsaken
in prophecy’s unfurled.
Author notes
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In a list
A contest entry
- B&W Photo Prompt Contest by Girl With Guitar.
700 points, ended October 30, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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nice write, great job and the flow is amazing. thanks for entering
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Beautifully penned. Vivid imagery with deep meanings makes this poem a worth while read. Great job!
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"In a world struck in silence
suns deceit bathes blue sky
radioactive fallout’s offence
the children are first to die."
That is one seriously bold opening stanza, very stark but amazing. You've already got my attention, which is a great start
There is one thing I would change. "that God's" to "where God is" in the last stanza. That's for flow. However if I've read that wrong, ignore that part of my comment lol.
Great work and thank you for the entry!
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This write and picture stirs memories of the movie terminator 2,the scene when the atomic bomb hits and it sweeps through the playground...
really thought provoking, bravo
Rob.
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Been watching documentaries of Love Canal? This was grim. You certainly provided the reader with something to think about with this one.
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Thanks, this picture really affected me. It's amazing where a picture will take your mind
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