She lay across the sea
with ‘calm head’ kissing sand,
‘Big up’ waves ‘buck up’ ‘gussy-mae’,
like she blocked their way.
Me and ‘doggie’ were frisky,
‘jumbey’ high with glanced promises
of ladies ‘boom-boom’ ‘bright’
against silver sand.
Even breeze just whispered,
didn’t want to ‘gin up’ or ‘hurt’
her ‘quarm’: swaying palm tree hips
‘jooked’ left then right,
melding into ‘crabbie’ heaven.
She was no ‘low fence’, her ‘long out’
played ‘jam up’ with their ‘sip sip’,
leaving ‘high’ carved across their faces.
So much more than a ‘jack’
when we ‘skylark’,
my head upon her ‘bubby’
soaking ‘jumbey’ from our ‘sweetheart’,
and I’m sure the wind has 'tote news'
to ‘conchy joe’.
Author notes
Title Option.
Written using some of the traditional Bahamian slang.
calm head - Smooth hair
big up - Pregnant
buck up - to crash
gussy mae - Big Bahamian girls with large 'bubbies'(breasts) & 'boonggy'(arse)
doggie - penis
jumbey - spirit
boom-boom - rear end, arse
bright - light
gin up - to screw up
hurt - to put a hex on
quarm - to walk in an affected way
jooked - stabbed
crabbie - vagina
low fence - someone who is easily taken advantage of
long out - pout
jam up - to the crowd
sip sip - gossip
high - a bad smell
jack - friend
skylark - good natured horseplay
bubby - breasts
jumbey - spirit
sweetheart - affair
tote news - to gossip, talk about
conchy joe - ethnic term referring to those of a caucasian inclination
A contest entry
- Tour De Monde - Stage 6 by Errant Panther.
300 points, ended October 7, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honest Critique Requested
Comments
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wonderful work here and thank you so ever much for the
breakdown of your carribean jumbey
as panther put it
great work here, and great effort put into this part of the race,
Thanks for joining in.
Warm thoughts.
Frozentearz -
cleverly compiled and obviously deeply researched to utilise the local slang amid your piece. for a conchy joe you have touched base with your carribean jumbey.
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well done and interesting concept used good luck
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This is a fascinating poem - thank you for the inclusion of all the slang that you used - I would have been lost without it
I like the feel of this poem - the playful kind of mucking around as it were very nice, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Keep writing
Polly
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Well well, what more can I say that hasn't already been said apart from the fact that you have certainly put some colour into the contest. Well done and good luck. Val
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OMG! Is this full of jumbey!
I think sis and I are going to get our boom boom's out on the dance floor!
Look out!
Excellent as always Bro
Love it!!!!
Sis
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Now this is something to "tote news" about!!
I love it...
I better get my "boom-boom" in gear and get my entry in...but with this one, I feel like "longing out" ,exiting stage left and "quarming" home
Just "skylarking" ya, "Jack" hehe
You rock, Bro
Lynda
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