September lights the end of day,
the golden west decays to grey,
like leaves so heart, so trembling chest
when eyes behold a smile with zest.
A secret ray.
The shoreline hides in darkest green,
the sand is white, the water's clean,
the scent of pines amongst the trees,
your touch of hand... this softest breeze.
A girl, a queen.
A star invades the rising night,
my finger traces lines of light,
you grace my ears - a lover's tune,
a kiss beneath the winking moon.
Just hug me tight.
The place where summer, autumn meet,
a bird salutes us with a tweet
before it flies to kingdoms high
from shadows to the dusk of sky.
Your kisses sweet.
My hair is tied with ribbon's bow
you play and play and let it go
upon my shoulders and my face
to hide my gaze's silken lace.
I love you so.
In hearts the fire's burning strong,
each beat a drum's escaping gong,
this love we never will deny,
with tearing eyes and happy cry.
A love life long.
Author notes
3. *pink sparkling panther*
In a list
A contest entry
- My first contest, please help !!! Allowing PW,s by justgot2loveme.
2200 points, ended October 13, 2008, 23 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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AMAZING!
This Poem Is Very Very Well Penned Out And Written
I Just Love every Bit Of It
Thank You And Good Luck
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lovely
dream like with perfect rhyme and flow, i love the form, i'm not a fan of this style but really enjoyed this one.
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Thank you Quill Bill.
~Sonja~
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Outstanding
Another gold! Your poetry is doing so well at the moment. You hardly ever write in rhyme so this was a special treat for me. I thought it flowed beautifully with a subtle rhyme scheme that added a sense of depth to the poem. The imagery as usual was excellent. Congratulations on the gold trophy.
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Now I really like this piece.
your words are very pretty and sweet.
Beautifully written
Good luck to you in the contest.
Justgot2loveme
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As I have come to know with your writing and enjoy, it is the beauty you create with your vivid imagery and emotion!
This is a very romantic piece of all that is dear to your heart!
Lovely!
My best to you in this contest!
Linda
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Today..I am at a tour to look the beauty of your poetry my friend..
Ahh..the beauty of this great nature and the beauty of love when are amalgamated with each other..the joy of universal bliss is inevitable..wonderful impact..well done... -
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Thank you dear friend for your journey to my colored land of poetry and for your so nice comments.
~Sonja~
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Alsome write
My hair is tied with ribbon's bow
you play and play and let it go
upon my shoulders and my face
to hide my gaze's silken lace.
I love you so.
In hearts the fire's burning strong,
each beat a drum's escaping gong,
this love we never will deny,
with tearing eyes and happy cry.
A love life long.
Love the poem it was amazin n love the way it was written and formed. Bravo u job u did a gorgeous write. Keep da ink flowing your work is amazin n i love reading it.. hope u doing okay an all i am doing good jus bein taking it easy. Once again great poem
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BEAUTIFUL! I love this to pieces! Best wishes in the contest!
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Beautiful love story, told so eloquently.
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AHHHHHH this is wonderful. The rhyme is just to my liking and the imagery is outstanding. Thank you for entering.
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Beautiful Sonja
You should win zlato for this one - your command of the English language amazes me - and what can I say that I haven't said before Sonja - Today is first day of autumn - summer no more - but love will stay from season to season - loved the rhyme and the flow - like a dance - moja mala grand daughter je ljepa kao jabuka - when I tell her that she is so happy - lol - keep on keeping on Sonja - Josipe ---------------------------------- hugs
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When you write in form, it is something to take note of. I enjoyed this poem very much, each stanza, each image - well rhymed with lovely rhythm.
The theme of youthful love and time passing is beautiful here, constant and faithful love. It flows from a full heart.
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Thank you dear friend. this is the only way I can write
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Stunning. Just soo beautiful. The rhyme-scheme is breathtakingly flawless. The imagery is so delicate, uplifting and peaceful
. I bet this poem can be interpreted many ways but no matter how you read it, you can't deny the beauty. It's just so graceful, like a ballerina in Swan Lake. 
Ellie
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My dear Ellie, comment from your beautiful and tender soul of young but real poet is appreciated very much. And I see that ballerina in you is taking to me too. Thank you sweetie.
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Wow.
Amazing expressing. Love the flow of it. Keep up the good work
~ Going for top comments, I am to poor to applaud~
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Thank you SilverQ. I will try.
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Ah ...
such a sensual transition between seasons. Superb poetry. It makes my heart sing ...
Love
Myra
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Ah, dear Myra, your hear always sing. Sometimes under the tune, sometimes loud, but as I know, each beat of your heart resounds with poetry.
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A beautiful write about seasons of love. Heartfelt. Very good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. You painted me a picture of the seasons and love beautifully in this piece. Unique rhyme scheme. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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Dear Shelley, your praise always makes me proud of my work. Thank you.
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How gorgeous, Sonja! You have penned some beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeutiful images here! Very creative theme.
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Than you very much for comment and your kind visit to my poetical shore
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I love this title, I clicked on it thinking I was on the contest page and wishing I could write to this prompt! Such lovely spontaneity it invites.
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Dear ea, I was thinking of contest but recently I am too busy for it. Thanks for reading and your kind comment.
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Beautiful rhyming - that's how i like rhyming to look and sound like. Loved the gentle fire smouldering among the words and images. Lovely!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you dear Nicolette for always being my devoted reader.
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