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Do You or Don't You?

They say old trees
talk after midnight,
spill the secrets
of lovers who confess
beneath their branches,
and those secrets
become the wind
blowing through clouds,
they are the songs
birds sing at dawn,
and the reason why
the moon glows at night.

‘Round here they say
love comes in on a ship
with sails ghostly white,
slips into the heart
of its intended while
sleeping in a dream;
in the morning,

eyes wake to new colors,
music falls from flowers
no one else can hear,
ground becomes air
and air becomes sweet perfume.

Believe if you want
or don’t believe at all,
but know this for certain -
life doesn’t owe us
any explanations.

 

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  • sunshine.
    July 4

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    the first stanza made my jaw drop. i said whoaaaaaa out loud. haha. this was beautiful, and so so creative.


  • Peripatetic gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    Why not?

    Life experience can be reduced to biochemical phenomena of the energy which makes up the matter of all that is. However, the metaphysics of soul and spirit are so much more interesting and – because we are bits of sentient energy – so much more believable.

    I love this poem!


  • exenia
    September 27, 2008

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    melod, simply great and very beautiful

    love gives us life and sometimes death
    love's so tremendous in its depth
    no matter whether you believe
    or not - you simply love to live

    and every round of the world
    is full of love of any mould


  • badnovocaine
    September 26, 2008

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    I so agree with this. This is awesome. For the fact that i liked how you described things so beautifully. And this poem is so true EVERY WORD of it. This does give me some things to consider greatly. I have never thought about how life owes us nothing. But when i thought about it, its so true... so so true.

    This is great.
    I think if i go on commenting i will just go on and on about how great this poem is.

    So i will stop otherwise this will be a very long comment



    (OH great job again wonderfully beautiful.)

  • moonflower
    September 25, 2008

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    i agree! ..life is all we get..it owes us nothing..not wealth, health, happiness, or explanations..great poem!


  • bigperm gold member
    September 25, 2008
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    very well written I think you have great talent


  • parenchma
    September 24, 2008
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    Red this to my wife
    She said I need
    Testosterone...


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 24, 2008
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      LOL...


      now, that is a great comment
      Thank you. Love, Lane


  • nevadapoet
    September 24, 2008

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    Lane,
    Another awesome write...the first stanza is metaphor magic...a definate inspiration to learn from. I have to ask...where do you come up with this stuff??? Each time I read, I am in awe at your subject matter.

    I believe it's up to each of us to live life so no explanation is ever necessary, but you're right...it does not owe us one.
    Excellent
    Thanks for sharing
    Shelly


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    You are a captivating enigma wrapped within a mystery Lane, a powerful beauty that was never meant to be possessed. You are doing what you were meant to do, you are where you were meant to be, your words have captured me wholly, enraptured my soul.


    With much love
    and respect,
    mj.


  • Balldinger silver member
    September 23, 2008

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    don't tell me - Norwegian wood? soft as the bough breaking... i don't believe i do, but if i did, surely i would have remembered, don't you think?

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    ... damn hun


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 23, 2008
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      Proph...

      those two words were all i needed
      Thank you.

      Love, Lane


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    September 23, 2008
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    Fine piece, this.


  • sultan gold member
    September 23, 2008

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    Ooooo ...

    ... this is so romantic, I just want to be falling in love. This piece is full of the 'stuff' that makes the world go round. Bravo, bravo, bravo!!!!!


  • Sesheta
    September 23, 2008

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    I believe I agree...
    The power of secrets, of magical love...
    The imagery, the pure poetry in your words...
    So sweet, so refreshing...
    So true...
    Amazing~


  • IronMaiden1236
    September 22, 2008

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    My Russian Queen

    красивая поэзия, текущая через мое мнение


  • michellemybelle gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    I always come to your poetry (I don't always comment) when I have lost my muse or I need a bit of magic. Thank you, I believe again.
    Michelle


  • sailor ptolema
    September 22, 2008

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    me too.

    love this, Lane .


    meg


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    Gulp, beyond words this is. You render me speechless continually. So I will depart with your thoughts in my mind and a sigh in my heart.


  • charcoal
    September 22, 2008

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    I believe too

    and when I begin to not believe as much, I can always read you and dismay disbelief

  • Topnotchsy
    September 22, 2008

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    This is incredible stunning from beginning to end. I'm not sure what you meant by the last line to be honest (would love to know the angle you were looking at, as I can think of a few.)


  • Demington
    September 22, 2008

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    This was enjoyable, the punctuation, the statements, the subtext...very enjoyable.

    life doesn’t owe us
    any explanations.

    This would have been cliche if it wasn't so darn true.

    Great job!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 22, 2008

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    The poem is nice, but I happen to disagree quite strenuously with your conclusion. Life does owe us an explanation and has already given us that explanation, should we be wise enough to accept it. It simply does not owe us the worship we desire in demanding that the explanation cater to our conceit and ignorance. I do love this. Have some bunnies who think I am a crusty old fart.


  • notorious
    September 22, 2008

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    Do I want to kill you for being talented...

    Yes, I do.


    LoL...
    As usual, I got the "Holy crap" feeling while reading this, and I love that you are so consistent in breaking my mind in awe like pimples (wow, gross simile).

    I love that you can create millionaire-rich imagery without making me feel like I'm reading abstract junkyards that don't make any sense when you pilfer through..

    "and the reason why
    the moon glows at night."
    WHAT a perfect way to close up that first stanza--makes me feel like it's a lighthouse hope or something like that. It's just fucking pretty...

    " 'Round here"
    Can I just say...I hate it when people chop 'around to 'round' ALL the time...

    This was the first instance that I saw ' 'round' and liked it the way it was--it makes me feel like somebody's telling a story, and that's why it's pronounced with a chopped off 'a'.



    "intended while"
    Amazing, amazing, AMAZING phrase!!!

    That last stanza...holy crap.
    Perfection x infinity

    "life doesn't owe us/any explanations" is so stunningly succinct, deep, and TRUE!!! Ah, you always know how to get to readers with your endings...

    Did I mention that was a flawlessly PERFECT ending??!!!!

    Obviously, I have nothing constructive to say for your deck of cards...

    Bookmarking!!!

    Jessica!

  • tara wilson gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    this is so beautiful, I love the first stanza, and the ending is so powerful - lovely imagery

    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Tara

      Thank you for the keen eye one always slips by me
      And thank you, always, for leaving me such great comments.
      Love, Lane


  • evanna
    September 22, 2008

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    oh, what a beautiful poem.
    They say old trees
    talk after midnight,
    spill the secrets
    of lovers who confess
    beneath their branches- you made old trees sounds MAGICAL

    ‘Round here they say
    love comes in on a ship
    with sails ghostly white,
    slips into the heart
    of it’s intended while
    they sleep and dream- what an exquisite image.


    life doesn’t owe us
    any explanations- my fav part!

    good luck with the contest.. not like you need it.


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      evanna...

      I am so very happy you liked this poem. Thank you for your time and for the applause. Love, Lane


  • moonbumps silver member
    September 22, 2008

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    No-life does not owe us any explanations-pearls of wisdom spill forth from your ever inspirational pen dear Lane-
    Hilly xxx

    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008

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      Hilly

      ...and magic will never spill her secrets. Thank you so much for reading and for the applause. Love, Lane xxoo


  • arafura gold member
    September 22, 2008
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    "life doesn’t owe us
    any explanations."

    Clean, simple and very good!


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      John

      your words mean so much to me - thank you. Love, Lane


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    Beauty in your words and thoughts Lane, as always a joy to read ... no, far more than a joy an exquisite delight ... and yes, I believe

    Love
    Sue


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Sue....

      I am in a good company of believers...Thank you so much.
      Love, Lane


  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 22, 2008
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    Cool
    Joe


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Joe...

      dig those shades Thanks, dear heart, for being here. Love, Lane


  • Peteskid gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    reads like a spell or a potion, life...so much of the good parts..requires belief...excellent...PK

    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      PK...

      Thank you for reading, for giving me a lovely rose,
      and for leaving behind three very appreciated yellow guys Love, Lane


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    Alastair, the apple tree, says he loves your poem, he approves, the robin however would like it to be known he never believes a word the trees tell him and if he did he would never pass on a rumour.

    The poem is perfectly formed (of course) and completely charming. Trees of course see and hear all, how could they not?
    Yes this is a wallet one


  • Matt Holck
    September 22, 2008
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    whispered from one ear to the next


  • tomisb
    September 22, 2008

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    Wonder of wonders, you are the bearer of stories that spin 'round camp fires and create meaning and understanding where only superstition was before. I should sit at your feet and listen to the truths you will dance upon the earths.
    Love,
    White Horse Flying.


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Tom...

      Aw, thank you, although 'round a campfire a good scary story is always best Love, Lane


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    There is something wonderful about this, Lane. Out of your imagination you have conjured up some folk-myths, and gone pixie-sweet on our asses; and then, in the final five lines, comes the whole point of your telling the tales, a volte-face, you take a clean cloth and wipe it all away. I tell you - it takes a poet to do that!

    OK, critique time. I am going to look at one phrase: "while they sleep and dream". You're using the inclusive plural as a singular, and I can see why. I am going to ask you if it would have been a bold stroke to have gone straight for the reader's heart, and used a direct singular "she" or "he": "while he sleeps and dreams". It would have been a clean cut away from the indefinite "they" at the head of that stanza.

    Life doesn't owe us any explanations, though, and you don't owe me a change in your poem. It's your baby. If you think it looks pretty dressed the way it is, then that's ok by me. I trust your judgment, k-c.


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Mairi...

      Believe it or not, you turn me on when you critique me Love, Lane


  • JohnnyD gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    I believe as well, for old trees, especially Oaks, are
    treasures from the Gods to bequeath their beauty and mystery upon the hearts of we humans.

    Around Savannah, the Oaks are so old that they are festooned with their own shawls to ward of the chill of winter-Spanish moss-

    their roots have felt the footsteps of lovers commitments and the scent of bare flesh upon grass under their spreading limbs.

    Of all the trees, majestic Oaks would be Nature's poet laureates, for it is they who have witnessed the best
    we have to offer.



    Len


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 21, 2008

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    My Lady

    The energy of life pervades all of His creation. We would be foolish not to believe.
    Well written and shared.
    Thank you.


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      King...

      I knew you were a believer Thank you. Love, Lane


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 21, 2008
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    very uplifting

    Beautifully penned and spiritually nutritious!
    Great work poetess..


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Rich...

      As always, I appreciate your reading and your words to me. Thank you so much. Love, Lane


  • Cannonsfire
    September 21, 2008
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    Yep tree's have eyes too ya know


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      Cheryl...

      ...and boy, what big eyes they have! lol Thanks for reading, my friend. Love, Lane


  • paulcreates silver member
    September 21, 2008

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    I do.

    Oh wow Lane. This poem is nothing if not "clean and simple" as the prompt suggests. I love this. It points out that the most thorough perception of simple love is to lay back and let it happen, enjoy. The more one does this, the more pleasurable things are. My favorite lines in the whole poem are these:
    "...in the morning eyes
    wake to new colors,
    music falls from flowers
    no one else can hear,
    ground becomes air
    and air becomes sweet perfume..."
    Yes, the ground becomes air, and air sweet perfume.

    ~~~
    Paul


  • csmmoms2
    September 21, 2008
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    Quite lyricle

    In the song of the canvas you've taken me. Clean and simple that's what you show. What-is-next?


    • Dalaney gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      CS...

      I don't know what's next but when it comes, I hope you will be here. Love, Lane


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    Could not resist,,,first in line!
    Oh yes,the old tree at midnight, gnarly and sappy.
    Alone on the headland looking to sea.
    Is that ship or a mirage?

    count my rings, fair and foul the seasons pass, narrow and wide, rain and drought...



    lovely poem

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