It doesn't seem like forever
could ever be long enough.
Does it my dearest?
It doesn't seem like eternity
is a long enough time.
Does it my love?
I'd need immeasurable amounts
and stretches of time.
All dedicated to convey my love.
Our kisses cannot last long enough.
Each one seems far too short.
During the act though dear,
time seems to halt.
Standing stopped all for us.
Time is immeasurable once more.
Your touches and words send
chills and tremors of love-
racing up and down my spine.
Whispers o I love you,
right upon my ear.
Tears are born upon my eyes;
the kind due from unspent emotion.
An overwhelming desire to be
wrapped safe into your arms.
Tenderly have you stroking my hair,
letting me know you love me.
Time standing still;
immeasurable once again.
Once again you lips meet mine.
Together we are intertwined-
linked in soul, body, and mind.
Two hearts beating but as one.
Time becomes immeasurable.
Stopped momentarily.
What for we wonder?
Could it really just be for us?
Yes, dear. Perhaps it could.
I love you, Love
thus time becomes
immeasurable all for us.
Author notes
Not that great, I know. Oh well. I tried. I wrote this when I was talking to my boyfriend, so I was just thinking. I'm love-struck I know.
Anyway, any feedback will most likely be appreciated. Keep in mind I was more shooting for conveying emotion than having perfect words. 
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
Comments
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very passionate
well written beautiful love poem
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This something about this piece, something in the wording and pacing that makes it feel like an older piece from an older time, maybe it's the overall feel of contemplative romantacism.
Good write.
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Sometimes, perfect wording cannot convey an accurate feeling. A lesson from experience. ^_^
If only time could really stand so still...O, how wonderful such times would be...neverending, for a splinter in time. The perfect romantic paradox. ^.^
You did well...or in Japanese, yoku dekimashita!
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Very muchly so true.
Definetely. I think we all wish to cause time to stand still.
Sweet! Now I know some Japanese!
Thanks.
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