Drowning through depressions; I choke upon emotions.
I never thought I'd be out of rhythms,
pains and sadness are my current symptoms.
I hope you know it's you I'm missing inside.
Reminiscing on old times, I see your reflection,
how you'd make me smile and bring me to life;
now that I'm all alone and feeling terribly sad,
tears on my face run out of expressions.
I've heard in heaven, we all have a star
that shines at our darkest moment in times.
Perhaps it's because we are too far apart,
that's why I can't feel you so much inside.
Even though, we've had some arguments and fights;
that does not mean we can't make it through alright,
Which life does not zigzag into fragments and run-ons?
As long as we both believe in each other, we can still go on.
Remember the day when we first met,
the smile that ran across your lips
and what I promised to always keep
as long as you'd always reflect life through me.
O' darling, today we're losing grips
instead of reaping serene bliss;
we've become victim of our prides
but I love you so much, I'm willing to let go
only if you promise me that you'll be alright...
Author notes
Option 2: Write a poem telling someone just how much you miss them. Please write it for someone still with us. I think it’s important to touch someone’s heart while we still can.
I wrote this one for a girl which I am pretty crazy about.
Her name I must not say
A contest entry
- No rules just Write by catalyst..
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Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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A lovely write you have penned. Sometimes it is hard to let go when we love someone. A very heartfelt write. Take care. Sandy
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Pretty Nice Write
I've been here where pride just messes things up and gets all in the way. Takes a big person to just wish the other was just alright and walk away. Hope all is well now. Thanks for entering and good luck. Hugs~ Cuddles -
Excellent write and great imagery!
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The rhyming in this was wonderful throughout the poem. The only thing I was a little iffy about was the last line. Maybe it would read better if you changed it to without a doubt.
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There is a truth here but also stark sadness. The reality of love always being afloat is unreal. There will be chasms, holes that need mending and broken-heartedness that needs tending to. Your poem seems to be a true confession of love and respect. It seems that oft' times we must let go to hold on. Yes, that is confusing but so is life and love. HOLD ON! Very finely crafted with wondrous emotional energy. I wish you well in the contest.
Always & Forever ♥
Mom
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Lovely Poem
You have pened a beautiful love poem. Full of longing to hold on to the love you share. Nice imagery! Thank you for sharing this very heatfelt poem. A pleasure to read. Take care.
Sandy
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ah this is good, i like it
thaks for entering
good luck -
This was truely poured from your heart. I hope she sees how much love you have in your heart for her. Outstanding job never stop writing.
MJ
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This is beautiful. I love the first stanza. Great write and good luck
~lae
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I forgot the applauses
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awwww sooo cute....
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