pungent smoke rises
leaf colors infuse the flames~
eyes tear, summer's gone
In a list
A contest entry
- Autumn Haiku 5-7-5 by piccola.
600 points, ended September 29, 2008, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beautiful I not only see it but smell it too.
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This meets all of the qualifications: The smoke reminding me of chimney smoke, or the smoke of burning leaf piles.
(autumn) eyes tearing was a surprise, that aha moment. Tears could be for the passing of summer or from the smoke
thank you for entering.
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Thanks for hosting this contest and for the trophy, a suprise for sure
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Dennis
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This is such a beautiful poem - I love Autumn (pity I'm just starting Spring then
) and the first two lines of this are so fitting - the last line puts a whole new spin on the tone of the poem and makes me think of the bonfires we had in the holidays good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Pol
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A very clever write and skillfully crafted Haiku.
Vivid descriptives. You paint a vivid picture with
your words. Very nice aha moment in line 3. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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