gosshawk soars into yonder sky
carrying the dreams of you and I
wishes whittled to dreary wonder
teasingly tango around the thunder
sanctuary shines amid fading light
utopian kisses unleashed to flight
floating over fields freshly hewn
enveloped by loves enchanting tune
destiny draws this heart of mine
deep within my dreams divine
so with these dreams I must elope
and pray these words of night bring hope.
Author notes
Just a poem to hopefully place a smile on Wanda's (Night Hope's) face for her Birthday. Many happy returns my friend.
In a list
- Beautiful Words by Beautiful People I Know • next in list
- List of Poems Written for Me by AP Poets (under construction) • next in list
- My Favorite AP Poets • next in list
A contest entry
- Breaking Loose From Birthdates - For Wanda by CarolDesjarlais.
1750 points, ended September 24, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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Your words never disappoint me and always leave my breathless and wanting more, I adore your use of rhyme and metaphor in this piece...simply beautiful Scott
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thank you my friend, I thought you'd enjoy this piece so I am glad to have sent the link.
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Lovely rhyme scheme - nice ending especially.
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You draw the reader up with rush of wings right from the beginning. A lovely dance...a flight of fancy. and yous et us down gently. Nicely penned.
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"sanctuary shines amid fading light
utopian kisses unleashed to flight
floating over fields freshly hewn
enveloped by loves enchanting tune"
These lines struck me the most, although the entire poem was quite lovely, thoughtful & perceptive. Thank you for coming by to honor my 50th; I'm pretty impressed, even if no one else is. 
Especially since I've been on my own & writing poetry for 35 of those years. It's been a "long & winding road", to be sure, but it's a journey I'd gladly take again (although with a few detours & longer stops at some places). Thank you for your kindness in penning this piece, Poet. Good luck in Carol's contest.
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thank you for the heartfelt comment, it pleases me to know that you enjoyed the read - saves me having to spank the muse lol .
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Beautiful, Cuz! She will love this!
So wonderful this dedication to a wonderful poetess and friend...
Great job on this lovely poem of beautiful couplets
Lynda
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