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Androcles and the Lion

 

Every verse is a shell for a moral, a skel -
eton which we expand when councilling,
wanton worries dispel (we can scan well and spell),
though transcend all end elling and illing !

Lordly lion’s large jaws are unused, like his paws,
'til his lady striped zebra’s sent spilling,
then he rages and roars, rips raw prey with sharp claws,
but it's mostly to show flesh is willing !

In the main, though, his mane and his booming refrain,
give the lie - ‘spite his timbre so thrilling,
for with pride by his side he can set pride aside,
and let others get on with the killing !

Every night at the well loud his larynx will swell,
while at jungle rill thirstily swilling,
yet you know very well ‘tis to show lioncel
how to act, an example instilling.

One should prowl nightly, bell howl with high decibel,
or else growl, which is simply spine-chilling,
while by day to keep well one should sleep for a spell,
as the tropical sun is too grilling !

So I feel you will find feline father is kind,
especially when cubs are a-milling,
though stay out of the sight of his mate or she might
take a fancy to you for her filling !

There’s a story some tell, (here in verse we excel),
truth from falsehood intent on distilling,
of a slave, Androcel, and a snell lioncel,
if you question my facts, you’re cavilling !

Yellow leo did dwell in a duned desert dell,
often went from his den to the hilling,
‘till with bellowing yell on a ratchel once fell,
and the wound sent his tuned voice a-shrilling !

From his pad Androcel pulled the spill, soothed the swell,
using prehistoric penicillin,
feral fears did he quell, they as friends said farewell,
thus destiny’s wishes fulfilling !

Between Mount El Carmel and the vill of Bethel,
where years later his travels were willing,
on his way it befell footpads armed with cudgel
ambushed him in the midst of their pilling !

In the old citadel, powerless to rebel,
he was sold as a slave for a shilling,
vain resistance to quell, for free, bold, chains repel,
impelled him into ‘ring ’ for a grilling.

He was cramped in damp cell near ramped ‘rena roundel,
where dread carnivores daily were drilling,
there rough romans compelled him, ret, short-sword as well -
hope he'd no intention of stilling !

When it came to his turn he was thankful to learn
that the beast there that held the star billing
was the one once infirm, thus thereafter he'd earn
laurel leaves from the Praetor, Virgilling !

Androcles' doubts dispelled, death decree was refelled
on papyrus scribe skillfully quilling, 
cancelling tocsin knell, toxin soujourn in hell,
echoed sounds of carousing, refilling.

People praise the marvel, ‘twas before chimed church bell
or they’d soon have been cheerf’lly carilling,
everyone would revel with sweet simnel, sardele,
to timbrel’s touch gaily quadrilling.

Here apt moral we rend, which from start until end,
in its heart says all men should be willing
to be civil to friend, mend his smart, make amend,
then existence will be just idylling !

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  • joshieod
    August 12

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    Maybe I need to read more but I could not understand a lot of this. Though it showed great skill I thought some of the rhyme was forced in some places. Especially at the beginning with the splitting up of skeleton. But overall, a good write.

  • pathetique.
    April 22

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    Very well compsed rhyme, I'm blown away by the skill you have used in this piece.
    Thanks for the entry!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 28

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    As clever and well constructed as we would always expect from you! It would be a better read on a much less distracting background so I read it after hiding it.
    Flow outrageous rhyme and story are all good and it is an ornament for what was already the highest standard contest we have run

    Thanks for the entry

    Jeff and Sue


  • BluesMan gold member
    February 26
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    My eyes are burning too. But i couldn't stop reading either I'm noy schooled on the technical aspects like Terry But I was very impressed with the rhyme , internal and end line Thank you for entering my contest


  • Terry-too silver member
    February 25

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    Infectious humour.


    Suggestion, could the image be rendered in tones of pale green, pale orange or pink, so the black lettering wouldn't be lost in it?
    Por favor señor! Estoy invidente.

    I could not read it without pausing. Eyes sting.
    Undiagnosed diabetes almost blinded me before it was discovered. Blood sugars are normal now, but aftereffects remain.

    Diabetic eyes unabating,
    blindness reverberating--
    only thing compensating
    was tale so non-sedating!

    Duty kept me going when normally the lack of contrast and background interference would have left it for others to read. It dang-near disabled me! They still sting!

    I'll shut up already.

    Humour was everywhere. In altered spelling:
    "...transcend all end elling and illing !"
    new context:
    ": but it's mostly to show flesh is willing !"

    double-syllable rhymes amid internal rhymes:
    "using prehistoric penicillin,
    feral fears did he quell, they as friends said farewell,
    thus destiny’s wishes fulfilling"

    My opinion?

    On the whole route,'twas a real hoot!
    "how to act, an example instilling."
    Rhythm's pursuit could near overshoot
    The reader both civil and willing!

    Remarkable fluency of form, content and fun!

    Another finalist--I'm glad the choice is not mine.

    Terry




  • Wow

    that must've taken some time to write. I really enjoyed your flow-thanks for entering the contest.


  • knitonepearlone
    November 20, 2008
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    This is a great story and well told, but not quite what I'm looking for. Thanks for entering.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    LOL. Only you can manage that much rhyme, assonance and alliteration in one poem - and still make it an awesome story!

    I definitely enjoyed this read. It had unstoppable momentum and rhythm and was just so.... catch-y.

    Wonderful entry.


  • unavailable
    September 21, 2008

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    So I feel you will find feline father is kind,
    especially when cubs are a-milling,
    though stay out of the sight of his mate or she might
    take a fancy to you for her filling !

    oh my....

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