goose dimpled
icy eyes in
winter gander
lay me down
where feathered pillows
find her plume
unruffled
greener grass
is nestled south
A contest entry
- HAIKU by Swan song.
550 points, ended October 5, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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lol These were very good and they went well together
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love the last one .... and actually haiku should always be a single katua...good thingie lol
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Pretty
Like the use of 'dimpled' (even if I don't care for dimples, although I don't hate them
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"feathered pillows" <3
Makes me feel comfy...
I like pillows when they're cold--sometimes I stick 'em in the freezer.
Last 'ku is my favorite...It's just...awesome. Makes me think of "Greener grass on the other side".
Jessica
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Kudos!
Succint and impactful. -
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Thanks
Nice to see you on the other side.
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Just how far south did you intend to go???
C
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All the way until it's warm and wet.
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Well then you'd be in the tropics lol 'downunder'
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below the tropic of unicorn horns
and stingless mosquitoes -
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Oh so that would be Melbourne then lol
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Was Mel born in Austrailia
or near the outskirts
bred upon a bobbling dingy?
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nice job here...
I hope it didn't take you an hour a line
Juls
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