Within the depth of how I roam,
over mountains, valleys, home;
I didn't choose to be a nomad, it chose me!
With so much ground left yet to cover,
embracing Earth now like my lover;
forever wandering, and now I'm running free!
There are times when this mentality
is challenged by venality,
to trade the simple pleasures for the gain;
but once you've travelled under stars,
felt the breezes from afar,
things the greedy value are just but a stain!
So, I continue on my quest;
a gypsy’s life that suits me best,
life is in the beating heart and it's in me
I don't regret things or complain,
dancing and skipping in the rain;
forever wandering, and now I'm running free!
Author notes
Venality (noun) showing or motivated by susceptibility to bribery
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A contest entry
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I think you've handled the mixed motives of this gypsy very well, and you have made the life sound free and appealing.
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i like it, a lot, amazzzzzzzzzzzzing job. lol
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I so much enjoyed the lyrical verse. This rhyme scheme is great and what else is there to say ... It was much enjoyed and thank you for entering.
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thanxu
Merry Christmas
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This brings to mind the great old song, “The Happy Wanderer” as well as my own dream to wander as much of the world as times of life permit.
“With so much ground left yet to cover,
embracing Earth now like my lover;”
This describes “wanderlust” better than any dictionary definition.
The rhyme and line length schemes of the sestets are interesting. Although the meter is not anapest, the aacbbc rhyme with the 2 short then 1 long lines encourages the sort of rolling gait usually achieved by meter and very appropriate for the poem’s theme.
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i found it i think "the Happy Wanderer" --> http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=0Wy_w7OlAMc its by Frank Weir and it was done in 1954? i hear my song more like with sounds of birds and streams and maybe a gypsy fiddle thing and a tamborine maybe 
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The youtube version is much too orchestrated.
I learned this song 40+ years ago in Junior High (Middle School to you?) choir. I have rarely ever heard it sung except out of doors and with a few strings and pipes for accompaniment.
The kids and I used to sing it in the car or on the trail on family vacations, so often enough there was only the harmony of our voices in the acoustics of leather, cloth and metal or the great outdoors.
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kewl i gotta check that song out on youtube now
thanxu
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Fantastic, f'd up and I love it! makes me think of fields and forests. Love it!
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WOW --
I love the rhyme scheme you've used, it is so cleverly written when read, it without emphasising on the rhyme but gives an 'accent' to pull the piece into a poetic wonderment.
I LOVED it ~ WoW -- I haven't read this side of you, yet... and as you've stretched... anyone can see the beauty in the write.
I also, wanted to mention -- the style and form you've used give a classic feel to the overall write!
Good luck in the contest, you really did a fantastic job!
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Beautiful ...
The AABCCB rhyme isn’t noticeable unless you’re looking for a reason that these words sing … in such a soft bohemian declaration of life. Bravo … thanks for sharing this.
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absolutely brilliant! as always
love the rhyme and flow, superb imagery that drifts gently like those faraway breezes....wonderful!!!!
Thank you for sharing this,
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Good work here
And so true are your words for in reading a work of art written from the heart its the meaning within for if you dont get the meaning portrayed you havent given yourself in life the freedom to play .Excellent piece here
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thanxu
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Kindred Spirit!
You wrote this as if you had a window into my life!
This is a really wonderful write & I'm sure you'll do very well in this contest. You've an amazing ability to express yourself my young poetess! My Mom used to call me Gypsy 'cause in my younger days, I'd grab my guitar, hop on the bus & train & head for 'Greenwich Village' NYC to sing in the Coffee Houses & in the park, street & restaurants for my supper. My guitar was open when outside, wanting monies for my songs & to help with carfare! I was running free. Now I can't, & I'm running on the Web with my writes & lyric! Keep on working with those talents He's given you! This piece has a fantastic flow, rhythm, & rhyme to it. Bravo! 
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Thanxu that must have been so much fun to go there and just take out a guitar and do that i would totally love to do that but my piano wont fit on a bus
plus i dont play or sing that good and im way too shy. i should have studied flute
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