Music plays drifting through the early night air
laughter sounds full of innocence and silly words
In the eye of the mind a little brown eyed girl twirls
Spinning round and round with a fire in her eyes
Thoughts race through words in imaginary games
dragons and pirates and treasure is the flavor of smiles
Sunlight glints of a fragile four year old too young to be hurt
Dizzy with the addiction of movement she starts to fall to the grass
Crayons paint the night with cupcakes and hand drawn trains
Little gifts of life sprinkling around blonde curls and giggling bodies
Smell of living redwood and childhood at its best are the scents of brown hair
Memories of flying on rain wet metal swings and hiding in the branches of trees
Heavy weight of a silly five year old fills my arms and keeps me balanced
Sticky fingers holding tight to mine as loving whispers of gifted secrets touch my ears
Light falling from between branches stained a four year old;s head with memories
Getting up again a brown eyed girl spins and twirls faster than her dizziness- innocent
Author notes
Sunday Prompt: Write a poem that portrays lightness.
A contest entry
- Live, Laugh, Love by aligurl.
425 points, ended October 11, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - [♥]Poetry Challenge[♥] by innocence jaded.xx.
3500 points, ended October 28, 2008, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of Poetry by headintheclouds.
450 points, ended October 30, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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tHIS is a beautiful poem good job on this one! I like how innocent these children are. Good luck in my contest and thankx for entering
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I had the feeling that something bad might have ended up happening to this child, even though she seemed to be having a wonderful time. I think it was the phrase "too young to be hurt" that made me wonder.
I was also struck by "addiction of movement."
The music in the first stanza made me think of ice cream trucks. Food has always been a high priority for me but, if you're kids playing, you really don't need ice cream!
Nice write. Congrats on your HM.
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Awwww:D
Wow, you are such an incredible writer! I truly loved this piece of yours, also:) The innocence and purity of this poem brought tears to my eyes. Again, I must tell you my favorite lines:~a little brown eyed girl twirls
Spinning round and round with a fire in her eyes~~Crayons paint the night with cupcakes and hand drawn trains~
~Heavy weight of a silly five year old fills my arms~
These images were intense and filled with an abundance of sweetness, tenderness, and a lightness of the heart.
Truly a lovely, wonderful write:)
<3
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Boy is this the day to bring out the inner creative child!!!
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OHH! I absolutely loved this. A child's innocence is a happy thing indeed! a wonder ful write. I could see her spinning and spinning and laughing so hard... a beautiful feeling. thank u for entering and good luck in my contest.
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