Still trees around you,
Forgotten dreams,
You stand..
Alone,
Forlorn, forsaken, cast-aside....
In a list
A contest entry
- 13 Words Only for this Picture XII by Manda Kathryn.
300 points, ended October 3, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poems' Wanted!! by SignifyingNothing.
450 points, ended October 19, 2008, 123 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is very good. It speaks of such solitude and could also be a metaphor for human life. Perhaps someone who is alone and witnesses life take place around him/her, but cannot be part of it. Well written!
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Aww, thats kinda sad, but even when we are cast aside and forsake, we must still stand proud bc we are who we are and no one can change that
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that looks like i house i have seen in my dreams bit, a house that each time i have lived in, keep it flowing and congrads on the HM
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This is a great description of the picture. IT really describes it to a T, in emotional language. Very well done take on a picture prompt. I can see why it won a trophy. Congratulatios on that,and thank you for entering my contest and letting me read it.
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beautiful
simply beautiful great take on the prompt. I believe this was better than a HM fits the pic perfectly. Well done, Boog
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You summed up the entire tale in a few lines and that too, so nicely.
Good luck in the contest
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The image is great for your poem. I like your poem alot. I think it says it all and gives a voice to many similar structures.
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i like this, it says alot in such few words, and a very powerful pic as well. good luck in the contest and take care
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Small as it may be, it is beyond that. With meanings deep within the poem, such as the metaphor I see there, like that of a human being. Meaningful, yet sad. Beautiful! Keep it up Ylova
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Wow, this was really good. I loved the way you made the old house seem to be sad itself and lonely. It was kinda like a metaphor because that's the waya lot of people really feel. Only thing though, I saw that the contest said 13 Words Only, and your poem is 14 words long. haha, but yeah, maybe you could drop the "There" in line three so it would just be "You stand,"
Anyway, it was very nice. Good job!
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Thank you Chamise I've removed the "There"in line three. Thank you very much for informing me. Hehe. :$
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