Everything you say,
doesn't mean anything.
The words come true,
but your heart isnt here.
You speak with such power,
only to hide.
Why are you so afraid,
to lead for the better?
You was to be in the lead,
but not the leader of life.
Speaking with all your power,
but only beleving in half.
Don't speak ever again,
if you don't belive.
You must believe,
in you and words.
If you don't,
then this is your end.
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I love the idea of the contest.. with the titles and all. I hope this is what you are looking for. I got really into it... tell me what you think this is about please..
A contest entry
- Teddy Bears and Sweet Tea - Like Americana At Noon by lowercase prelude.
3050 points, ended October 5, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please tell me what you think
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Well for one, I think this has the capability of being a really powerful piece. However, there are a few things hindering it, I do believe. One of those is how often you line break. Don't have so many separate lines. Also, don't tell the reader what to feel, but still but the emotion there on the table. This is where imagery comes in.
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I know this is supposed to be unknown.. but i just wanted to thank you for the comment and to tell you I love all your poems
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It's okay. I just keep it anonymous so I don't get accused of biased judging.
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well you are very welcome on the comment and yah i know what you mean well good luck in judging
♥always Kate
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