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Shelter

Missing image
Weathered cracks on her face
Lines taken its toll
both inside and out
 

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Picture Credit: http://digitalhomicide.deviantart.com/art/Abandoned-House-5166705

Metaphoric write meant to imply human aging or perhaps a metaphor for a “crack house” such that lines refer to drug usage and the results of drug use

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    October 15, 2008

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    This is a wonderful short write. You added and breathed life into something that seems so lifeless in the picture. Congratulations on your green trophy also. Best to you


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    A a great metaphor it is! It also eloquently tells the story of a house that is weathered and perhaps had more than enough of turmoil going on within the walls..


  • Amera gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    Wonderful take on the picture using only thirteen words. I love the metaphor of human aging.

    Love,
    Amera♥