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Luxury



She didn't want to know him 'til he paid her with a pearl
  He gave a pearl for every single kiss
And when he paid he found she was a very sexy girl
  He left her with the longest string of bliss
The man who paid in pearls it seems was quite a wealthy man
But she's a girl of many dreams and hatched a little plan

Now she's lying on an island with her lilies all around
  And she's counting out the pearls and all the rest
For she's happy with her riches and the way of life she's found
  She knows of all the jobs she has the best

She found another lover who had money left to burn
  And so she found her love had multiplied
Each little bit of pleasure was a treasure she had earned
  She loved his cash and all that it supplied
He bought her such a mansion and her dreams are real life
And the plan she hatched is working and she'll never be a wife

So she's lying on an island with her lilies all around
  And she's counting out the pearls and all the rest
For she's happy with her riches and the way of life she's found
  She knows of all the jobs she has the best

The last man she enraptured was the richest of the three
  And he gave her things the others couldn't know
She's the Queen of all she's wanted and the fruits of life run free
  In the picture you can see a few on show
She's a life of perfect splendour and she lazes on her bed
I wonder what she's hatching now inside that pampered head


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Picture is PEARLS by =manips-of-artist2 on deviantart

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    A very creative poem, nicely done. I do like the story you've woven here, great take! Thanks for entering and good luck


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 25, 2008

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    Ahh I know a few women like this myself!!!

    A very creative take on the prompt! She does look pampered doesn't she?

    Fab!

    (psst. got 'with' twice in the third line of the repeating stanza )


  • sxylilma
    September 23, 2008

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    slick

    this poem says so many things without really saying them
    "and she'll never be a wife" powerful line
    great poem

  • StroonsGreen
    September 22, 2008

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    "She didn't want to know him 'til he paid her with a pearl
    He gave a pearl for every single kiss
    And when he paid he found she was a very sexy girl"

    Wow jeff i am impressed. You should win hehehe
    <3


  • SilverQ
    September 22, 2008

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    Hmm

    Nice flow but dont like how you mix money and love, because then the love is false

    ~ Going for top comments, I am to poor to applaud~
    ~Need advice for me poems,thanks~


    • cricketjeff gold member
      September 22, 2008
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      I don't think she was after love!!!

      I'm not advocating a lifestyle just writing a poem about a picture


  • Pearl-1
    September 21, 2008
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    get a slice for me jeff im starving
    xxx


  • Amera gold member
    September 21, 2008
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    Well done!

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