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Walk.

Slanderous mouths speak poisonous words
Chipping away at the fractured soul
What mischief can come,
from walking the wild side

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  • kristian 28
    September 1

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    nicely done,have you got the last line from some song?i swear i know these words,from somewhere walking the wild side,or is that a phrase?care to elaborate?

  • blind ecye dog
    October 15, 2008

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    Hey,
    The first two lines convey something building to a spectacular finish. Your last two lines are not it, are not universal.
    You lost me there. Specificity is difficult, but important, when using so few words.
    I think I know what you were on about but I am not sure. RED

    [Impending IM]


  • Jason Smith
    September 25, 2008
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    Not bad at all :P

    Very true, nice choice of words


  • dustookie2
    September 22, 2008

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    Once it has been spoken damn hard to take them back Then again a walk on the wild side can be good for the soul. Great take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest. We got eyes opening up... and mischief in the making...


  • LovingAngelForever
    September 21, 2008
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    Awesome

    Awesome job Keira. That poem is really true... Words hurt, don't they.

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