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This solace aging

 

 

 

                     shingles of    age
                     wed windows of
                         decrepitude

 

 

 


                            a   house
                            like time

 

 

 


                            wrinkles

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Picture Credit: http://digitalhomicide.deviantart.com/art/Abandoned-House-5166705

13 words

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  • Lady Altheia gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    hodwinked

    Houseslke people wrnke. Houses get creaks and and aches just like people. I really liked your poem and your comparison was perfect.


  • EeyoreUK
    September 22, 2008

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    what an interesting style of poetry...but then saying so, you never cease to amaze me. Best of luck in the contest my friend. Today and always Jess


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 21, 2008

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    Stunning!! You have captured the picture perfectly my friend!!


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    September 21, 2008
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    WELL DONE!
    Excellent usage of 13 words!
    I would have DIED!
    ears/Seattle


  • Never Fall in Love
    September 21, 2008
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    I don't nderstand how a simple picture of a house inspires you .. but damn, this is good.


  • Topaze
    September 21, 2008
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    Very nice, my best wishes always.

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