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Unwanted Gift

I have a little knife, hidden in my drawer
My mother gave it to me, when I was very small
She showed me how to keep it, sheathed, shiny and sharp
And use it when I needed most - when men would know my heart

 

I learned to keep it hidden and safe from those who know
How to use a little knife, to make their sweet man grow
I learned to be so careful, because the knife can make you bleed
And use it when I needed most and not to show my greed

 

As time went on it seemed, the lessons did contradict
And I saw her green eyes flash, each time the blade was flicked
I saw the droplets in the sink, the bloodstains seemed so wrong
But still I took the knife from her - the feelings were so strong

 

If you have a little knife, that your mother gave to you
Grind the blade away and bury the handle too
I thought I learned her lesson and I could understand
But every time I caress him, the blade is in my hand

Please comment on the meaning and how you feel it came through.

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  • rite
    November 4, 2008

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    As we attempt to put to words our thoughts and feelings, our perception moves along in the process. Memories revived in perceptions evolved. Sometimes time must separate us from events before we can return to them with different eyes. A process flooded with emotions that we try to fit into a rational frame. Sometime we are able to do that. Sometimes not. The possible revision you refer to in the author notes will present themselves when time does its flawless work. Enjoyed being on this page to read and ponder.


    • Jade Allgood
      December 1, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your feedback and your thoughts. You are right when you mentioned that memories are revived when your perception changes. It took me a while to fully understand what influences really shaped who I am and writing unwanted gift helped me to explore that further. If I had tried to write this 5 years ago no doubt it would have been different because my perception of myself and my parents was very different then.


  • Symphony
    September 30, 2008

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    Wow this sent shivers down my spine; you used such disguising language - at first read, I was thinking, "you wha?" but, after going back to read, I saw the hidden depth to it and just thought "wow".

    And, it's true - how much we can find ourselves remaining loyal to our parent's teachings, no matter how much we might want to break the mould. Great write and thanks for sharing it


    • Jade Allgood
      September 30, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your comments Symphony. You really understood where I was coming from and it is great to know my work is appreciated!


  • Anu-Nataraj
    September 30, 2008
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    !!

    wow....great imagery poet..
    lovely write!!!
    ~Hugs~


  • trekkergirl
    September 30, 2008

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    I think you came through this very well. Cutting isn't a healthy way to survive anything. Cuz in the end you always cut to deep. And parents aren't always right. Sometimes you have to depend on what you feel is right and wrong. For adults too can be messed up. All in all I felt this poem said a whole lot and I am glad that you have gotten beyond what your parents wanted of you. Good job!


    • Jade Allgood
      September 30, 2008
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      Thank you for your comments trekkergirl. It is great to see so many interpretations of my poem. Don't worry I don't cut and never have. The knife was more a metaphor for anger and aggression. I'm glad you still enjoyed my work!


  • thewhitesettler
    September 30, 2008

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    A very well worded piece, knives can wound and kill. Pepper spray may be a better alternative, but that's life. In the 1st stanza it did not rhyme very well, maybe you didn't want it to rhyme, but after that each line rhymed one after the other. A very thought provoking poem. Cheers Gordon...


    • Jade Allgood
      September 30, 2008
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      The knife was meant to be a metaphor for an aggressive nature inherited from my mother but it is interesting to read other people's interpretations. I chose to have a more relaxed rhyme scheme in the first stanza to try to emphasise my youth and innocence at the start. Thank you for your comments and support Gordon.


  • Nangaleema
    September 28, 2008

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    yes it is so hard to escape the teachings our parents engrain in us even if we want to. i thught you captured how deeply a mother's influence or example can impact a woman for life. a thought provoking read. - NANGALEEMA


    • Jade Allgood
      September 30, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment Nangaleema, you understood my message perfectly. I love my mother dearly, but feel I becoming her more everyday in good ways and bad.


  • SoldiersRain
    September 21, 2008

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    Wow. I really can't explain how much I loved this poem. The depth of verse and thinking that went into this are extraordinary. I think this poem may mean more to me than even you! hahaha. This is an amazing write. I'm bookmarking. Thanks for sharing!

    Tal.


    • Jade Allgood
      September 21, 2008
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      Thanks for your words, SoldiersRain. It is great to get that kind of feedback and knowing someone really enjoyed your efforts and also understands your message is very satisfying.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    September 21, 2008

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    Humm..very thoughtful verse touching the many layers of the life...well crafted truth.....and thanks for sharing it...

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