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You Aren't Different

and you walk through me
transparent lids
can't hide the unsteady blinks
eyes with fingers
tenderly cradle back the tears
and I won't be recycled
just to save the world
off-white paper crumpled
between your knuckles
and your first hand brushed
the hair out of my eyes

while your second hand[smoke]
burrowed into palms

like the future we were born to let down

your nails against my back;
 blood is thicker than water

 

 


unless the water is

 bloody


and the blood

  is watery.

Author notes

Six months with me, and I get stood up and ignored. I'm sick of crying, and waiting around for a call that he was never going to make to begin with.

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  • CatastrophicSmile
    October 14, 2008

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    unless the water is

    bloody


    and the blood

    is watery.

    this was very creative i looooved it so much. it gave me a lot of inspiration.
    i know how you feel


  • written-in-ink
    October 5, 2008

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    idk

    i like but i think that the top needs some separation cuz it was hard for me to read it
    other wise it was a great write


  • girl shaman
    September 27, 2008

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    great venting poem; i do love the ending as well sorry i couldnt comment further dear im really pressed for time but you are so appreicated and dont let anyone take you for granted!


  • TChaplinette
    September 22, 2008

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    i would have copied & pasted my favorite part in this comment, but seriously.....the whole poem was my favorite part!

    it was amazing, and i'm sorry about whatever happened to make you write it.

    i love you so much!