Was I created by God
to be who i am?
This I, that is me,
am I doing the best that I can?
Have I followed the path?
Am I the one?
Am I the me,
I was created to become?
Have I sacrificed my horizons,
by recognizing boundaries?
Why was I hesitant to
explore new territories?
A child needing to please.
Pedestalled, pathetic,...me.
I was a compilation of
what they needed me to be.
The perfect student.
The perfect son.
The perfection of perfection.
The chosen one.
I was one dimensional,
a chameleon rebel without a flaw.
Keeping up a facade of perfection,
using my "personality mirepoix".
Rebel with no actions.
Rebel with no motivations.
Rebel with no goals.
I need universal, architectural, donor, renovations!
Again, who am I?
When did i make the mistake
of seeing myself through their eyes,
knowing the sparkle was fake?
When did I create
this mask I wear,
hiding, hidden hues,
the me, "non Ger"?
From what this mask saved me,
I have no recollection.
I may never know what set in motion
my life of "phoned-in-perfection".
Hidden childhood memories,
hidden to protect them, or me?
I know there here, inside me.
At times I've sensed
that their Creator,
the I, (I don't remember),
the me, (I might have been),
is also the watcher, and protector.
Will I ever remember the boy
they saw, when they saw me?
Will I know the hero ,
who took the bullet destined for me.
I'm integrating an inner intervention,
I'm introducing man to boy. A delicate resurrection.
It's a beautiful day
in the neighborhood,
a beautiful day
to look under your hood.
Can you re-align?
Can you re-design...
my psyche?
A contest entry
- Do You Have An Interesting Mind? by SomeGirlYouKnew.
1850 points, ended October 4, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tell out your soul... by Hannie.
600 points, ended October 29, 2008, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
contest i read the rules
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wow such a awesome poem....also very interesting and lets say...different.......awesome work thanks for entering and good luck!!!
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thank you for fixing your errors. that shows initiative.
this is very thought provoking and it digs deep.
good luck in my contest. -
Interesting.
Make sure you're following all the rules, so you won't be disqualified.
Good luck in the contest ♥
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very kind
thanks for the heads up. i can get sloppy if i try to do something too fast. thanks. i have re-submitted.
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this did manage to make me think, but there are too many spelling and grammar errors for me to take this poem seriously at the moment.
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Thanks
i am so sorry about the problems with my piece, it was a late night, and I got sloppy in my zeal to finish and enter it. I wanted to let you know that I have re-worked the grammar and the spelling, and I believe it is correct now, (or at least it is how I want it ). thanks
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