I stare into the 6 by 4 inch frame –
Wooden, and in need of varnishing –
And see a heartbreak staring back at me.
I found her in my newly dusted home,
A woman with bruised and jaded eyes
That reflected with misplaced piety,
A girl who’s held together by flimsy
Nylon strings and cut-out paper hearts
That sold her short and left her tombstoned
Amongst the rest of the surviving dead.
Her bun-prisoned hair sat stiffly on her skull
And her plush, vacant lips were drawn in a
Subtle downward arc that confessed to me
That she never loved a day in her life,
But longed for the conviction that she was
Just unlucky. I fell in love with her.
I ached to delve into the black and white
And resurrect whatever fires were left:
Chemical residue of Polaroid
Memories that don’t belong to me.
A contest entry
- Proudly Presenting: ROUND 2 (: by Walk-Free.
1500 points, ended October 7, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i realise i have already commented on this but i'm in a rather bizarre mood today. it's almost as if i'm another person. anyway, the poem's smashing.
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wow!
I love the imagery and the feelings in this poem.
The sadness was maintained but it starts chnaging into a quiet love towards the end.
"Her bun-prisoned hair sat stiffly on her skull
And her plush, vacant lips were drawn in a
Subtle downward arc that confessed to me
That she never loved a day in her life,"
such beautiful lines which express so much. I really loved the path of this poem and how the phrases were used. bravo!! good luck!!
loveees,
transit~
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oh my god!
this is beautiful! your descriptions were awesome, clever word choice. great flow. wonderful imagery. simply gorgeous! thanks for the entry, enjoyed it loads, keep penning
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Good luck in the contest, throwing some love your way from the Big Man!
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please credit the phrases to checkmate and put your username in your AN
this was really exeptional in my opinion.
a really descriptive poem. i loved every last bit of it.
you place checkmate's phrases in almost flawlessly.
brilliant work
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