I know exactly what you see.
Just a guy with brown hair,
ordinary dark brown eyes,
and a southern drawl voice.
Quite the standard assumptions
that you tend to make.
I understand this though.
Just it's that I see
something so entirely different.
I see the same boy you see.
Dark brown hair
and deep brown eyes.
I hear that same
southern drawl.
It's just noticed in
a very different light.
To me those eyes sparkle.
Resonating with emotions;
love, hope, inspiration.
Brown eyes are beautiful.
Colored not with usual crayons,
but with the bark of willows.
The true ancients singing
deep within the winds.
That brown hair,
so normal to you.
Soft, amazing, inviting
it is to myself.
Qualities of gentleness
reverberating in a sense.
That down-south drawl:
that one that you hate.
It draws me in
with bass sounds ringing.
Low voice marked with love;
pulling me deep within
its rolling low state.
With a face of light,
built upon love.
I could not help but fall-
fall deep into love with him.
My love came not
from seeing perfection,
but from seeing what
no one else would.
My love came from noticing
that true perfection lies
within the imperfections.
Author notes
3. You come to love not by finding the perfect person, but by seeing an imperfect person perfectly.
^Above was my prompt^
I less than three you all!
Starlight-Owl
PS. I might accept ideas on making this better, or I might just leave it as it. It really just depends. 
Most likely I will welcome any sugestions.
A contest entry
- Options~~ =) by Ti Amo Te Quiero.
360 points, ended October 10, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
Comments
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Absolutely wonderful! I love this poem if only everyone would take the time to look that deep into others. I'd bet you'd find that both the world would be a better place and love would be much more easier to find.
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Great writing, I enjoyed reading this!
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That which is perfect NEVER changes hence it is our imperfections
that allow us to grow...
Eddy
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Very good job on this one, vice, even flow to it. You have the ability to pull the reader into your poem, refusing to allow them to go until they have inhaled all the aroma that you have to offer, and in this case, a whole lot. Very nice texture to this write, and effective wording content, as well as awonderful message, at least for me. once again, nice work. I am brand new on this site, and your poem is one of the best that I have read. I am searching for similar writers as myself. Sorry for the long winded review, but thats what I usually do, Bye for now,
John
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Well done
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nice flow
two thumbs up. its simple, and almost perfect. third from last sounds a tiny bit awkward...
maybe instead of
"With a face of light,
built upon love.
I could not help but fall-
fall deep into love with him"
try
With a face of light,
built upon love.
I could not help but fall
deep into love
with him
or something along the lines of...im not really critasizing, its really great, i just think its flow would maybe be a bit better if you vhanged that part abit somehow
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Well done, what fits is what fits, I wrote a poem with a similar message and believe in that message,I like the way you describe him, and a love poem that's real rather than mushy.enjoyed
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If only everyone would take the time to look that deep in others
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This is an awesome piece and I hope that your boyfriend likes it when you show it to him on his birthday. Awesome work.
PS Why does everyone's comment say "Bandit's United" at the top of it??? Lol...
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Because they are all part of a group on here called The Poetic Bandits. (Including myself.) My poem was spotlighted. That's why I got all the comments.
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i like how u put in 2 perspectives on it i would tell more of the personalty but i liked it (p.s. i would give u applauds but im out lol)
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Very nice
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Great
Now I can feel what this person is feeling. So many emotions. I love it! -
so honest
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Cliched and not offering anything that has not been said before a milion times over..but it is still sweet.
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Cliches are cliches for a reason. Sometimes they are what fit best.
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BANDITS UNITED!
Exquisite! I truly hope you make absolutely no changes to this glorious poem; for it delivers the truest message of love, that which is not surface, rather going as deep within the heart as possible to find the true person often not seen or heard on the surface. It is perfect in every way and, certainly, it should be awarded GOLD.
Much love & hugs, BonnieQ
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This is a very nice poem! I really liked it alot and I know exactly what you mean, your portrayed your feelings for him very well. This was a nice piece, I read it twice
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Bandits United!!!
This is really quite sweet, your words show love and emotion and the way that we can see one person so differently to the world when we are in love with them.
Sorry that the bandits message is late, but hope this finds you well
Shari
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I lvoe you Screen name along with you poem! it was moving and sweet. The detail and effort you put inot it was nicely done
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Bandits United!!
I love this piece and how you accentuate his eyes especially. I love blue eyes best, but upon reading this I appreciate brown eyes more. Excellent job, and I hope he really likes this! =]
~M~
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BANDITS UNITED!
Un poema hermoso sobre se. Usted tiene una gran profundidad de la expresión y usted brilla en cada línea.
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BANDITS UNITED. This is your specical day in the spotlight. Enjoy. Liked the prompt and how you interpreted it to write this poem. Wonderful to feel this way about someone and write like this to let them know how you feel.
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Bandits United!
I feel the love resonate throughout! I can only imagine how this made David beam! Bravo on expressing your words of tenderness for this man.
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BANDITS UNITED !!
Ahh... Poetry that melts a person's heart. So truly said and sincere. You have a knack for this, poet.
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BANDITS UNITED!
Beautiful poem of dedication and filled with honest love, great write!
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Bandits United!!
Aaaaaaaaaaw~ this is Precious and how Beautiful You see the Gifts within him~ how they draw You closer and how Precious-Priceless they are
Love this and the message You have delivered~
Beautiful~Beautiful in every way
Many Blessings in all You do~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart
Best wishes in the contest
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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good take!
Even Shakespeare could see flaws in his beloved and write about them. Loving someone comes from acceptance of who the individual is not the 'idealized idea of perfection' that we may choose to seek.
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Bandits United
This piece is absolutely beautiful. The way that you describe brown eyes is something I was trying to do...and you have done it flawlessly. The last couple lines are so true. Enjoy your day in the spotlight!
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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Bandits United...
A lovely poem I find penned here, the imagery is grand and the words flow with ease, the emotions are strong and to the point, love and beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder.
you have been spotlighted by the Poetic Bandits and I am so glad to have been apart of it Have a Great Day
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Bandits United!
I liked how you wrote about your devotion in such a poetic way. When we love someone as deeply as this even their faults become endearing to us. This is a well-written poem that speaks of love and lets us see what love can be.
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BANDITS UNITED!!
My love came from noticing
that true perfection lies
within the imperfections.
You build your case well for the ending conclusion. What one see is influenced by what one is looking for in the first place. How perfectly boring it would be if everyone was perfect and all the same. It is the diversity of form and character that gives us uniqueness. You have expressed yourself well in this well thought out piece. Write on!
You have been Spotlighted by your Poetic Bandit family today because WE CARE!
Brother Dennis
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Bandits United!
In these lines we see unconditional love that sees beyond imperfection and finds the perfection that one appreciates that truly matters....Well thought out and penned in a moving fashion!
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BANDITS UNITED ! !
Seek not perfection only the good in everyone, then perfection is an unattainable dream.... JUDMC
A lovely well written poem with a message for us all
not perfection but well along that road....George
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BANDITS UNITED!!!
Love is beautiful, isn't it.
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Bandits United
I appreciated the inherent structure to this piece. There is a definite introduction and then you explain your case. But rather than being completely rational and dull, you have used this structure to clearly communicate your love. Cheers
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Bandits United!
A beautiful poem, I love the descriptive details in this; captivating and strong
Wonderfully penned
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Bandits United!
This is just about the sweetest poem I've ever read. I love a man with a southern drawl. What a wonderful tribute to your boyfreind...
Love & Light
Debbera
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BANDITS UNITED YAY!
You have a loving heart and generous mind and this poem proves it. I imagine this young man's mother sees him as wonderful, too.
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Bandits United!
This is a beautiful poem I really love the sweet nature, and the open love in this - it is such a true poem and I'm glad I had the chance to read it!
Polly
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BANDITS UNITED
I sure any guy would love this flattery. You did well. a little goes a long way...mac
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Bandits United!
My love came from noticing / that true perfection lies /within the imperfections - that last stanza really got to me. What a phenomenally beautiful poem; thankyou so much for sharing, my friend, and keep up the great work!
Maria
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BANDITS UNITED
Very beautiful and full of love. Your imagery and passion are powerful.
Love and hugs
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awwwwww! I love this one! Its really sweet and its so true that we can see the world in the one we love while others see them as ordinary or annoying
peace, love, & cheese -
A wonderful write
It's amazing how one person can see the love of her life in a person and the other just sees a waste of time
This was terrific
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Absolutely stunning write! I love it! The title is what really grabbed my attetion. Great flow as well..it was easy to follow and read. I applaud you in such a fine write.
ing alone,
Mylee
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