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Road Talk



Walk with me
down this road
where we used to
play under May sky.
Remember?
Go ahead
laugh,                                                           
you're thinking
of that day
when I sat
beside you
while you cry.
Forgive me,
I didn't realize
proposal
creates rainfall.
Love you?
Silly question,
this road
would be too long
without you.


                             

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  • Let.Me.Be.Dreaming
    July 15

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    I think the poem is pretty good. Not exactly what I'm looking for but well done. Thanks for entering.


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    September 22, 2008

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    excellent

    Simply beautiful
    Expresses wonderful lovely sentiments
    Best of luck in the contest
    I entered too do hope you come give mine a read
    Hugs
    Susan~~~~


  • poetryality silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    Your heartfelt sentiments sing in this poem. Very nicely written from a spirit that knows true love. Thank you for this entry and I wish you well in the Comp!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    Awww so sweet and lovely
    This is what one could
    call true to the bone love.
    Great write
    Good luck.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    Simply beautiful and heartfelt!
    Lovely thought that you put together
    for this contest. Good luck to you
    with it and thanks a lot for sharing
    it here!




    Jeremy0826

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