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Into the Suffering

You meant everything to me
and when you set me free
I was lost, torn.
I felt abandoned and scared.
I didn't know who to turn to
where to go or how to feel.

How are you supposed to feel
when hate hugs you and love
chokes you?

I wish you were still around.
I can't eat.
I can't sleep.
My dreams of you have turned to
nightmares.

What are you supposed to dream about
when hate hugs you and love
chokes you?

I miss you sometimes
but I'm recovering.
You still leak into
my thoughts and
that leads me
into the suffering.

How can you feel okay
when hate hugs you and love
chokes you?

You tell me you still
miss me too.
I say you're lying
through and through.
How am I supposed to
trust you?

Who can you trust
when hate hugs you and love
chokes you?

I've tripped and fallen.
I'm scarred and I hear
others callin'.
I won't answer to them.
I can't do this again.

I can't stand the
hate hugging me while
the love is choking me.

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  • ScissorhandHugs
    September 20, 2008

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    i luv how you repeated the lines and changes the beginning of it -"hate hugging me while
    the love is choking me " also luv the true emmotions awshum write


    • writex
      September 20, 2008
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      Thanks :]

      I thought repeating added emphasis haha.

      Thanks :]

  • DarkRomantic113
    September 20, 2008

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    I've felt like this before. It's demoralizing to be mislead in such a way. Who can we trust once that bond is broken by the one person who deemed worthy? You use of personalifying hugs and love really helps this poem. The idea of a hateful hug wrapping around us is easy to visualize. And love, such a confusing emotion is interestingly rendered as choking us. I saw love suffocating us sometimes. Beautifully done.