I crack up when your crack addiction
makes you crack and your family grieve.
He scars your face, even in fiction.
You are chewed out when Charlie leaves.
Tina satisfies your need for speed.
She starts life's race; I say adieu.
Your car is trampled by a Red Bull stampede
and there is no chance to choose continue.
Adam is earth's very first man
and the last one you will ever see.
I know why you joined the hottest clan:
You wanted to be filled with pure ecstasy.
(Chorus)
Mbodied as your best friends.
Demons guide your life to its end.
Mbraced by those who take trips.
Aimless journey to your apocalypse.
Henry wants to control my life in vein.
He chases dragons, just to be thrilled
but I don't needle him; he's insane
to hunt something that gets him killed.
Mary Jane winks at you with her green eyes
and you have a chronic crush on this Miss.
While your relation has its all time highs,
your body can no longer live without her kiss.
In the sky you'll see Lucy, a wife
without diamonds; it's your delusion.
This acid girl controls your life
and brings it to its burning conclusion.
(Chorus)
Does a cereal abuser want Special K
or does he prefer some sweet Smack?
No-names take just twelve steps to stop their decay.
At my war against drugs, I won't hold anything back!
(Chorus 2x)
Author notes
- THC = the psychoactive substance found in cannabis
Charlie = cocaine
- chewing coca leaves (which contain hints of cocaine)
- In Scarface, Tony Montana became addicted to cocaine.
Tina = meth
- Need for Speed = videogame
- Red Bull (Stampede) = getting energy is one of the effects of meth, like you get from drinking Red Bull.
Adam = XTC
- Ch. MDMA = XTC
Henry = heroin
- in vein / in vain
- chasing the dragon = when heroin is heated on tin foil and is inhaled afterwards.
Mary Jane = cannabis
Lucy = LSD
- Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds
- acid = slang for LSD
- cereal / serial
- Special K is a kind of cereal / slang for ketamine
- Smack(s)= kind of cereal / heroin
- Recovery groups such as Alcoholics Anonymous use the twelve-step program.
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I totally get what you are saying and you have put it in a way to reach the masses, a clever story you write highlighting the missuse of drugs and dangers, good material to use in schools. Thankyou for entering.
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Henry wants to control my life in vein.
He chases dragons, just to be thrilled
but I don't needle him; he's insane
to hunt something that gets him killed.
Mary Jane winks at you with her green eyes
and you have a chronic crush on this Miss.
While your relation has its all time highs,
your body can no longer live without her kiss.
Awesome. This is very good. Keep penning. -
Wow...this is well done. Very thought out. Perhaps one day this will be turned into a song. It was very well done. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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Wow, bravo! this was excellent
Thanks for entering & best of luck -
Creative and clever write! Looks like you did a lot of homework before writing this! I am unaware of anything related to drugs but, yes we need a war against it, atleast to save humans from falling in this unending pit of addiction!
liked the poem a lot!
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good.lovely and tru
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There's a lot of really fabulous worldplay here in general. It's really brilliant stuff. There's a lot of well-penned lines. But, for me, it all kind of sours because I just don't agree with the perception of drugs that's being spoken here. I feel that drugs are tools and can be very useful, but that there is also mass ignorance about them, and a wrong way to use just as well as a right way to use. There is a good side as well as a bad side. I feel that there is a very spiritual aspect to drugs that this poem completely tosses aside and doesn't even consider.
I feel that altering our consciousness through the ingestion of psychoactive substances is something that is as natural in us as sex, but we have placed thick moral dressing upon it. This isn't to say that we shouldn't first research and come to know the ins and outs of every molecule before we decide to use it. Or, again, that there is a wrong way to use.
See: that's the problem. Or part of it. We don't teach the ins and outs of every molecule. We only teach a War on Drugs propagandist view of drugs, which focuses on certain bad aspects of drugs in order to program us from an early age as to how to perceive drugs.
I find it pretty disgusting personally when a plant is banned, or for the fact that cannabis has valid medicinal, scientifically-documented data, yet the DEA is still raiding dispensaries. . .(Though this is subject to change, because Obama has announced that he's going to fire and hire new members of the DEA office.)
I have witnessed firsthand the disgrace that is the WoD. I have seen how it isn't necessarily drugs that's the problem, but that it is how we decide to view them in our society. This is just something I feel deep within my soul. . .
I used to be completely anti-drugs, interestingly enough. To the point where I even stayed off of caffeine for two years. Obviously, my perspective has rapidly changed, but I do have to say that from an objective standpoint, there is a very large misrepresentation and misunderstanding of drugs at a mass level.
So, despite all of that, I can see a lot of Walkyier's influence in you, and the same in me. . .I can really appreciate your playfulness with language. It's very delighting. -
Loved the rhyme in this. This was such a cleaver write.
Good luck in your contest. -
you call cocaine charlie ??? are you english ? me too
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You've put this together so cleverly, i can just tell that you;ve thought about each and every phrase and it's relation to the topic in genral. Weldone with the signs for all the drugs and double meanings, and the key at the end is great. Very well written and your range of vocab is equisite.
Good luck in the contest,
Tammy x
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This is a very creative poem. I've read poems where people use names of different elements to mold a creative write, but never have I seen drugs used. I don't condone the use of drugs, and I don't use them myself, but I do like this poem!
"Henry wants to control my life in vein...but I don't needle him; he's insane"
Very well penned lines. Again keeping with the whole "drug" thing, that would be obvious to the reader, but not the listener as so many words in the English language have different spellings and different meanings.
"Does a cereal abuser want Special K "
I found this line kind of humorous. Great write!!
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wow, this was very cool. I think it should be published if it hasn't already. It could realy help many kids to chose to not do drugs. I think the fact that it's a song is a possitive too since alot of people love music. I just think this song could have a very possitive impact on children's lives, you did an excellent job. keep the pen flowing
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Awesome!! Straigth edge 4 Life!!!
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