"hatred" streaming for these lips
the keys that
clicked
clicked
clicked...
I watch you through a one way mirror...
do we keep these
good apperances up for the sake of our pride?
I think you just dangle a mouse
waiting for your thrist to be satisfied.
click
click
click
and when I view you face to face
I see this person,
this ultimate hate.
but when I look in the [seeing glass]...
I realize what you really are,
the other half of me,
the one that I tried so hard to hide
delete
delete
delete
got swept up on the generalization of the story line.
Author notes
yeah i dont know
im sure recent things have affected this
but i think that i like it
and no it is not to be taken the wrong way
i dont know it was just something ..?
i tried...
A contest entry
- "To see you, I have to look deep within"-This is the prompt by Sensuity.
600 points, ended September 29, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I rather liked it, actually.
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i really love this!
and the structure is witty and works greaaattt.
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hm. i really like this.
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thank you love
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"hatred" streaming for these lips
the keys that
clicked
clicked
clicked...
accidental rhyme, maybe me happy
I liked it
YUP=]
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hahahah
i didnt notice that
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well that was my like, face thing
hahha
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I enjoyed this piece very much.indeed it was an honest write...I feel that way sometimes and I guess at some point we all can relate to the real message in this piece.Good Luck in the contest and keep up the good work!
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This realy spoke to me, I love it.
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aww thank you
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Your welcome
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