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Transcendental Soul

Missing image

 

 

Stage lights cast

an eerie glow

as he makes love

to his guitar,

 

beads of sweat drip

onto strings

as he pours himself

into the moment

 

notes with no lyrics

float off into the air,

like incense

in paisley patterns

 

and after

a long set of

infatuating melody,

he ends his performance

 

with these fitting

soulfully

sung words,

"Even blue skies, burn sometimes." 

 

 

  

 

 

Author notes

Option two,phrase prompt by 'Checkmate' "even blue skies burn sometimes."

I'm a BB King fan, so this phrase kind of struck me as bluesy.
The photo is of course the great BB King himself as a much younger man back in the day.

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  • LilyAngel
    September 22, 2008
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    so heartfelt. music flows through the lines. fine imagery. great thought. love this a lot.


  • Beauty Of Silence
    September 22, 2008

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    wow!

    this is pretty impressive! the picture, the wording, the italics! gerat presentation here. i love your beginning stanza, you started the poem well, and ended it perfectly! thanks for the entry, keep penning!


  • secberm
    September 22, 2008
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    Love BB myself. Write on, bro and good luck.

    Dez


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    Stunning! What a take on that prompt... makes me want to go listen to some blues!


  • Walk-Free
    September 21, 2008

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    credit the phrase to checkmate and username please

    this is what i call penning down a perfect moment. short and sweet; simplicity at its best~

    the descriptive was brilliant, and i enjoyed this write very much.

    the thing i love most here is how you used checkmate's phrase. it fit the poem perfectly

    "notes with no lyrics
    float off into the air,
    like incense
    in paisley patterns"

    truly amazing job

  • tara wilson gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    "notes with no lyrics
    float off into the air,
    like incense
    in paisley patterns"

    I particularly thought this stanza was strong - wonderful poem, mj!


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    I've missed reading your poetry while you were away and this was the first thing I saw this morning. It's beautiful and filled with soulful thoughts that held me enthralled from the first line to the last.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret


  • poetryality silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    I love B B King! Your poem is sheer genius, and refelctive of his soulful spirit.

    I once worked with Robert Jr. Lockwood who says he taught B B King how to play the guitar. Mr. Lockwood also made me notice that, as he said; "B B King is tone death, and does not play, and sing at the same time". It's true! Check him out in a live performance and see for yourself.

    Mr. Lockwood also said that the original "Lucille" was burned in a house fire, and the one he has now is the second guitar. Yup heard it from the legends mouth, personally.

    Sigh! My dear friend died around my birthday last year.

    Great work! I wish you the best in the Comp!



    Much Love ♥

    Renee


    • MJ Donnelly gold member
      September 20, 2008
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      Thank you for your very kind and uplifting comment Renee.


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    September 20, 2008

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    Oh, I am a big fan of 'the blues'
    ... sigh. This is great!

    Juls

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