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Father (Haiku)

A faded smile lit
Callused hands
Tuck me in at night

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  • Samplette gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    A nicely crafted piece. I like the impact of it. Thank you for entering the contest. I enjoyed the read.
    Sam


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 24, 2008

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    Good imagery to describe the title, but what form of Haiku is this... curious. The usual pattern calls for syllables of 5,7,5

    Best wishes to ya!