Turn off the light before you go,
remember to bring your keys,
and don't forget,
your coat is still in the dryer.
Gently shut the door,
as you walk down the stairway
we once walked up together,
muffle your footsteps.
When you pass the photographs
lined up in the hallways,
try to ignore our daughter's smile.
The Lexus you bought for me
on my last birthday,
go ahead and use it,
the keys are on the coffee table,
besides the snow-globe
I insisted on buying for the holidays.
If you come back home,
remember to shower first,
you know how much
I detest the smell of perfume.
Don't worry,
I won't ask, and it's too dark
for you to see the tears anyway.
Any grammar errors?
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Thank you for entering this piece.
I both.. well, it was hard for me to enjoy it. I enjoy it for what it is- a poem, but it makes me feel all the worse for what I've done. Thankfully we're too young to be in truly committed relationships- like the one you wrote of.
I... thanks. You did a wonderful job.
<3 Lilsie.
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I heard you speak this
This reads as though you were talking to me,it is so raw,real,true.Appears to be a painful write,but maybe you gained strength from composing it.Unbelievably brave creation.I love this. -
Wow. The pain leaps off the page. I couldn't imagine this. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you.
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wow, this is so straightforward but at the same time leaves room for the reader to think. the ending is very powerful, I really liked it a lot.
goodluck and thanks for entering
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My gosh this is so to the point. Wives are cheated on. As a man, I dislike men who do such. Your last two lines made me tear up. The poem was well done.
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I like how its so up front and honest.
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Raw & Powerful
Hello there I am a judge for the contest Project Un-cliche! any ways I really found your poem here quite emotionally griopping & moving too. I mean the over all depth flow and deepness to the poem really hits ones emotions. any ways a very well written strongly penned write about pretty muchto me a cheating spouse who comes home to you even after doing the dirty deed. any ways good work and good luck with the contest(s) -
I like it
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The twist in the end is so good, and a lot painful. I love this poem a lot.
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Humm..I like the soft scenario of the life shown here in this heartfelt write..well done....thanks for sharing it...
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