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Shattered glass tales
of you and of me
of time and of cherished
of lost and at sea.

Like the heart racing onward
you taste mind and hate
to dance upon midnight
declaring I’m late.

Doomed to the faulty
of me being me
wrought in this flesh
and decay to be free.

I’ve loved you  too many
these endless shore days
asphyxiate his wave
and declare this wench faze.

Ending, time’s dying
the pebble of shores
and bottles with letters
but now we're just whores.

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  • DesolatELifE
    February 24

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    Wow. That's enough to erase any doubt. Very nice. 'Doomed to the faulty
    of me being me' isn't as good for me as the rest.

    I like this a lot, and the ending is wonderful.


  • word20dragon
    September 22, 2008

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    Real

    I am so for a loss of words for this poem. Feeling such pain when you wrote this someone must have hurt you bad.
    Keep writing man I'd love to read a surreal poem from you sometime the images that you could throw out I think would be awsome...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 22, 2008

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    This is wonderfully written hun, despite it's sadness...



  • Facial Pagan
    September 21, 2008
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    ...


  • addicted
    September 20, 2008
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  • poppa
    September 20, 2008

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    another great write roomie... amazing the hurt one feels when love goes awry... love your imagery


  • RainbowSky
    September 20, 2008
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    oopppssss


  • RainbowSky
    September 20, 2008
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    beautiful

    i love you, this


  • echo-ink
    September 20, 2008
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    OH! and loved the bg, Yessa!

  • echo-ink
    September 20, 2008

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    Steph, this was amazingly beautiful.
    Just loved it, with a bucket full of teardrops.

    I got it!!!

    Love, mummy,


  • misshugglebugglez
    September 20, 2008

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    wow!!!!!!! this was beautiful! i thought it was just so amazingly good! i especially enjoyed the second to last stanza...
    "I’ve loved you too many
    these endless shore days
    asphyxiate his wave
    and declare this wench faze"
    omg, just too good! i love your imagery! nice work! =)
    -pb fudge


  • Meroza
    September 20, 2008

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    This poem is amazing, I love its rawness and the background gives is a special feel to, it is a Stephannie feel

    Dont let that pen rest!


    • luna-midnight gold member
      September 20, 2008
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      aww thanks, and hahaha, i sorta hopes it has my feel to it, i think


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    September 20, 2008

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    The background is amazing. As well as the poem- yet its sad. =[

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